South of somewhere
Searching for someplace
Drawing me closer somehow
I found the elixir of something
Author notes
A poem of the essence of process. I wrote this poem December 29, 2007.
Invoke thought?
Comments
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wow, well you packed such a punch with this stamp sised masterpiece
its just wonderful
T
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very nice
it is a very well piece keep them coming and also thanks a million for sharing
I will be reading you again
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Breezy
Basho is one of my favorite poets. We developed the modern Haiku. he taught a lot about lightness in poems. How poems do not always need to be weighted down with words.
Your poems has that air of lightness about it. I feel a transcendent feeling about your poem. It is very spiritual in a sense. One can feel the human soul reaching out to something beyond.
Thank you for sharing the journey with us!
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Very Nice Stephen
I sudenly feel Serene, very soft flow.
Blessings
Rend
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Glad to know you have shown us the elixir of something! Brilliant prompt and message Stephen!
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I like this
seems I am not the only one searching for something
somewhere
hehehe
hugs moony
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Short but meaningful
Most of us live south of somewhere, searching for someplace to breath easy, drawing us closer somehow to a life contend...yeah this short poem allows the readers mind to wonder, it's good how you've put a lot of meaning into four short lines.
You commented on mine so now I know of your existence, and that's gotta be great for both of us. Thanks for the comment.
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excellent~
The pic of the tree limbs is surely somewhere out of nowhere
Yet they drew you nearer and you found the sweet exlir
Love the imagery in this in and the pic
Also thanks for the nice comment you gave me as well
Hugs
Susan~~~
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oooOOO I like this... I think the elixir of something made the write for me
Peace and Love
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Thank you for your comment on my poem I thought I'd stop by and read your works, and I am glad I did. Wow. This was beautifully written. Short, yet very, very deep. Full of meaning and a beautiful flow. Well done
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wow
This poem has a nice flow to it. I'm not entirely sure how to describe what my first that was...it's almost as if you're lost, but still know exactly where you're going. I find it very intriguing. Well done.
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SWEET
that is deep and my friends say props and BUGZIE likes it (awsome)
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Really lovely
It's not possible to capture a thought in a glimpse of four short-lines...sixteen words to be exact. Yet you've done it.
Dylan Thomas said: (it's not a poem)
"I couldn't be at home
if I were at home
everywhere I find myself
seems to be
nothing but resting places
between spaces
that become resting places
between resting places themselves
it may be a primary
lonelyness that makesme feel
out-of-home".
And...it IS south of somewhere.
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the picture and poem aroused some nostalgia in me...during the rainy season we had flood like that ,all the children watching the water rising, drowning everything with only the top of things visible...that was long time back when we lived in the countryside as children...now in the town with only flooding memories..
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Interesting
I like how the readers mind is allowed to wander to their own destination,
it allows a lot of freedom.
I really like this piece.
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WOW!
Amazing write, Takes to reader's mind to many possiblities..somewhere! I LOVE THIS!
P.S. thanks for visiting my page, and do you plan to write anything on ap this year?
because it's coming to an end you know.. l.o.l. j.k. but really I would be interested in a new post because obviously you've gained even more 'insight' since this write.
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Facinating
This is just increadible insight with so few words. You leave the reader to imagine in their own minds their own destiny of going south of somewhere, searchin, drawing closer, then to find something. The first and last lines embrace this short poem perfectly. I would say excellent write. Thank you so much for sharing with me.
Many Blessings
Kelle Marie
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Wow i really liked that it was short but i like how you didnt put any specific place down it allows different people to interperate it in their own way. Nice Work
P.s i love you picture its beautiful
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I love the way you encouraged my head to fill in the "something", somewhere someplace, somehow.... An intriguing write, indeed, in such few words.
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:)))
very well said....always searching for a place that one wants to fit in...and when we find it it draws us in with out us even relizing until we sitting for yrs in that someplace...very well said i enjoyed it ! best of luck to you
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i likes it ^^
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hm, this fits my current state of mind very well. i like it.
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Affecting! Poignant!
What drives us to a particular end? Or are we always on a continuous search, unsure of where we belong or what our purpose is? Each day we are a little closer, or so I believe. Your piece is thoughtful and meaningful and even though terse, it is quite effective and was a pleasure to read. Best, Elizabeth
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hmmm, this is very interesting.. I like it..
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Interesting, like a drifter coming to realize he needs a home or is it a spiritual somewhere?
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Splendid write in its brevity. Says plenty to me. I believe this year you will find someplace and taste of the southern magical elixer that will draw you to that "somehow" of your dreams. You are closer than you realize. And the timing couldn't have been more perfect for this write. Be expectant for 2008! You spoke to your own spirit and this year has plenty of good in store for you. Be watchful. Be blessed!--Kel
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Oh. This is an interesting little poem that you have penned here. It was very short and kind of vague but I guess you're giving the reader lots of room to think and wonder about things with you. That's what you wanted right? I thought that was cool.
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This is short and simple what you've written here, but it definately leaves the reader thinking about it...
Original write
Leander -
Wow. This is neat. Its...wow. It makes me thing, I love it. Its very abstract, which I think makes it fantastic. Its pensive. At least, that's what I've gotten from it. Thanks for making me think.
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A bit enigmatic
As we all live under the North Star it's probably right.
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i like this poem
it dioes feel healing
you had great flow in this poem
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