Drifting afar in the light of day,warmth of beaming rays streaming upon my face.
Wandering through the world proclaiming all the exquisiteness normally taken for granted like grains of sand millions available, until only one pebble left through all the lands. Than it becomes a precious find, to every man and woman alive; they want to hold it gently in their hands, they seek after and proclaim, it’s exquisite and unique.
Drift back in the days of young child at play,
honey suckles sweetly upon your lips,
the taste as sweet as a first gentle kiss...
Let the winds carry you through memories
of strawberries growing in the wild and
cherry picking stains caressing your skin...
Washing them in flowing fresh spring water,
streaming and pounding, against the rigid
rocks as you hear nature’s divine final call.
Green apples hanging amongst the large tree,
picking them gently from their limbs all there for free,
taken granted and left to rot.
Till the day comes
and man sets a price upon his apple trees.
Now they are precious. Yet, no longer for free?
Long forgotten travels return to me,
feel the sun-rays caressing your face,
don’t run and hide in the shades of darkened grays.
Stop taking life for granted, I am all yours for free.
Humanity, take time and breathe as the grass blades of green,
the deciduous trees, all changing in colors exquisitely.
Inhale life, for the bitter sweet;
exhale grief for the darkened of night.
Accept changes as winds blowing through the limbs
From sweet smells and first bites,
you took off that apple, from the old tree
sweetly standing strong.
Remember the wonders
of all your first
feelings in a juicy burst.
A contest entry
- for the poets who think they can write imagery (pw allowed) by abuyi.
1200 points, ended January 24, 2008, 29 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I commented on this once before so I can't leave bunnys. This is one of the poems that drew me to you so I can learn how to write free verse. This poem starts with a captivating image and continues that strength through out the entire piece. You have the gift of being able to paint pictures in my mind and that my dear friend is a gift, not just anyone can do it.
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Excellent!
Some lines really stuck with me in this piece!
I really enjoy reading ya, for you share so much.
Thanks for bestowing us with your gifts here on ap.
Congrates on the silver, and keep up the wonderful works.
Peace, Timothy
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Excellent
WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oh my goodness.
I am awestruck by this wonderfully and beautifully penned piece of poetry.
I really don't know what else I can say.
Congratulations on your most deserved Silver Trophy.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
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Wow
This was brilliant. Such great imagery and such deep provoking thought for the reader. I truly enjoyed this journey of ones life. Congradulations on the silver. Happy Valentines Day and thank you for sharing with me.
Many blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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Ah the apple
Well written. The poem had a mystic flow to it. I think a mention of Adam and Eve in the poem would have set it off with more. I would go through the poem and get rid of thise contractions. THey sem to weaken your work. Then, maybe, what do I know. -
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thank you
However I do not see the apple as the forbidden fruit of adam and eve, it says tree of knowledge it could of been a bananna for all we know.
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Awesomely Exquisite. Wish I could write poetry like this, definitely a flow and style that can be learned here. I really enjoyed this and will be studying your beautiful poetry more. Thank you.
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Somehow I can see the life of one apple tree backtracking here as its age has nothing to do with the way it was showing as a new sapling. This wind is some form of historical seer. As we take a look at humanity, it's as if, we are being looked at closely, at that this tree were the Tree of Life. Loved it, gorgeous in fact!
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wonderful imagery...you took me back many places and to many things with this write. Maybe if we as adults would feel free to indulge in the things the way we did as children , our lives would be carefree for those few moments...taste the honeysuckle, jump into rain-puddles and sing at the top of our lungs even if we can not carry a tune
Thank you for this bit of "cheer" and best wishes in the contest,
reenie
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Amazing
I love this poem. So much meaning packed into a simple motion, a single action--that reaches through the world. A fantastic read.
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Wonderful
Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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this was realy a memory lane poem for me written so well and packed with vivid colours and images
just what poetry is suppose to betray
wonderfuly done
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This was just gorgeous. I mean honestly this without doubt belongs in an imagery contest... it was just flowing with vivid descriptions and pictures seen just through words. By the way that picture was breathtaking... not that you should need it but good luck in the contest.
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An apple tree is a gift of many pleasures. I once had two in my yard with a peach tree and also grew strawberries with a nice vegtable garden. Moved away from that home...and I miss it all. Now getting a bit older I still think of the days in the yard with all my wonderful fruits and vegtables. Smelling so fresh...your poem brought back many memories for me..well written, I enjoyed it alot read it twice..thanks for sharing
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beautiful
good luck in the contest. I love the imagery you show.
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This is such a wonderful piece of imagery to provoke the mind, and color the poetic canvas. Such depth of description to illuminate the yesterdays in between. The last stanza springing for hope to hold onto, memories to cling to, and beauty to forever cherish. Great write!
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This is one of the most beautiful poems i have ever read.
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This is beautiful and it made me feel just as if I was in the orchard. Your imagery is wonderful with color, smell and motion. Wonderful poem.
Love,
Amera♥
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An excellent piece. Truly filled with wonderful imagery. Best of luck in this contest. ~Pamela
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i am so happy to see that this is not a pre write, it is some thing that is written for this contest.. thanks a lot for entering
i loved your imagery but i loved your message more, its so true that best things in life are free, god made nature for free, to be used as a fuel to life not to be priced and to be taken away.
fix the typo in your last para " expressed" and i feel there is a lil work in Punctuations..
have a nice day
abuyi
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Thank you
I am still working on this one, I started on it rather late last night, got tired and went to sleep. I will have it completed before the end of the contest
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Im not good with comments...but i like it...
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Lovely lovely poem Great write dear much imagery in it
i wish you the best of luck in the contest
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