So calm yet so rowdy so quiet yet so loud
Emotions mix in my head making my mind a cloud
Don't know what I want or need don't know what’s wrong with me
Keeping it all bubbled inside until I go crazy
From people I see there is always something missing
And there I go again trying to do people fixing
In seconds I change from happy to sad then mad then glad
Because I have so many negative memories since I was a young lad
What should I do I ask talk about it they say
But when I do they don't care what I say anyway
I fight to never show my feelings or bring up the past
But thoughts in my brain shall internally last
And forever I hold deep inside my heart
All it does is wait until I'm happy to tare it apart
Now I'm in moods that are saltier then oceans
Don't know what to do when I have these mix emotions
A contest entry
- Give Me [[RAW EMOTION]] by brittany.geeze.
525 points, ended January 8, 2008, 18 entries
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Comments
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I liked the word play you had in this piece. This was a great expression of your feelings. It definitely showcased your ability, this piece. I enjoyed this. Great write. - cgirl0410
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Okay I'm not trying to sound mean or anything but i think this would have been WAY better without rhyme, because with the idea of rhyme their you had to edit your words... and you never put the requirements in your A/N's
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how can it possible be better without rhymes that doesn't make the bit of sence.
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wow
you have a talent of writting poems i'm guessing. this poem had alot of feelings and meaning! good job
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this was a great write well done
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Hey
Hope this is good enough for the contest.
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