a dawn broke bright the day after yesterday
and half heart felt words littered the floor
of a life swept away
the day before yesterday life stood by the open door
peering eagerly at untrodden pathways
with hope sprang anew on the battlefields of evermore
the day before yesterday
clocks chimed and flowered vines intertwined
as the newly made settled old scores
Theoretic apologetics tried to quell all known heretics
the day after yesterday
Seeds of happiness and hope grown
where they were far flung sown
as you and I have to find a new home
the day after yesterday
but what can we say but that today is the day after yesterday
and a life once lived cannot be reviewed by instant replay
so carefully tread through the open door
and take care to avoid the pitfalls and landmines
that scatter the fields of evermore
as you embrace the day after yesterday
Author notes
when I actually wrote this-for annothertime, another place, I didn't realize what the day after yesterday was until I was 3/4 thru writing this but I liked how it came out =D
A contest entry
- for the poets who think they can write imagery (pw allowed) by abuyi.
1200 points, ended January 24, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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beautiful write and thanks for entering my contest,
i loved your flow and also i noticed how your every stanza has unique rhyming sequence.. except your third stanza ,this is beautiful freestyle.. well i am happy with your imagery it was something differnet than usally what i get
best of luck
regards
abuyi -
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Thank You
Thank you for your kind comments. I like to hear what others think about what I write. Call it writers vainity ( somthing all writers have) but it is also something we need to improve. As I mentioned befoe in my notes this was written for another time, another place. But this is one of those pieces I felt good about. thank you again for commenting
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BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO!
oh..i liked that...half heart felt words littered the
floor of a life swept away...excellent imagery!
Captured us right from the start pulling us into the
poem! peering eaglerly at untrodden pathways..love it!
A feast of imagery to enjoy! This is my first time
reading your poems, what a talented writer you are,
excellent flow..and written imagery for us to enjoy
with enough air in it to let us flow right along
with you. Will read more of you and learn!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )) excellent poem!
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Compelling write
Wise words that all could live by.
clocks chimed and flowered vines intertwined
as the newly made settled old scores
Theoretic apologetics tried to quell all known heretics
the day after yesterday
This was my favorite stanza - it was lilting and musical.
Very nicely done!
Wolfie
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a dawn broke bright the day after yesterday
and half heart felt words littered the floor
of a life swept away
i really like this...it holds power and emotion. keep ti up -
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I like how it came out, The day after yesterday is all we really have treasure it we must
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Excellent
The images you planted in each stanza created a portrait of a sudden surprise ending to something that had been expected to last forever. I felt a connection to the writer that comes from shared experience. The last stanza was by far my favorite. -
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