My mind spinning with pain and dread
It's times like this i wish i was dead
Suffocating loneliness surrounds my heart
Wanting to tell you, but don't know where to start
Being ashamed of what I've become
I know it's not true, but i feel like i have no one
No one to guide me through this journey called life
Give me one good reason why i shouldn't give up this fight
A contest entry
- Write Me Pain by Broken Machine.
800 points, ended December 31, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - THE BEST OF YOUR BEST by Whispering Wind.
900 points, ended April 16, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Intense Emotion - PW Welcome by Heavens Child.
300 points, ended May 31, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 10 of 10
-
I don't know how many times I have felt this same way. This has really good flow and I like the rhyme. Best wishes and thank you for entering.
-
Emotions flowing all over your page and the question most of us has asked at one time are another...Why shouldn't I just give up! very good! Thank you kindly for sharing and for entering:f
-
Its powerful.
its like pain slaps you in your face.
it doesnt suck!
cheer up missy! -
you think it sucks i think it one exelent poem vary welly writen
-
Beautiful! Just so powerful for a short poem! I can see the emotion and creativity practically shining through your poem. Don't say it sucks, I really liked it! You did a wonderful job.
-
It doesn't stink! It as really good! You expressed you pain really well. It also had some good imagary! Keep writing and best wishes in the contest!
-
awwwww.......
this is really deep, dark and emotional. I think you did a wonderful job expressing your pain!
*hugs*
i really am sorry you feel this way.......
-
Surrounded
Days come and go, but why at times does darkness seem to forever loom? The spinning spiral of falling becoming lost in the masses of unfortunate pains that come into our lives that we never ask for is deeply felt in this poem. I believe in the irish in me and my motto always is: I refuse to die. The "journey" I walk as well, but I stumble and hobble along - so you are not alone, I am here stumbling along as well
... Anna
-
well i think its amazing. this completely describes me at this very moment, no joke. like, there's all these things i need, i've needed, to tell a friend of mine but i dont know how to tell her and i just found some stuff out about some people lying to me and gahh. anyways, enough of my rambling, i thought it was really good.
-
Are you kidding me?! I love this poem it is really good! Thank you so much for entering and good luck in the contest! ( =
Adding your comment:
1 - 10 of 10
