Every word,
A reminder of your non-existence,
Every word,
Another thought of your bitter resistance,
I'm going under,
Every word,
Is a heartache to me,
Every word,
Won’t let me be,
I'm going under,
Every word,
Is a tear that falls,
Every word,
Is an echo of my calls,
I'm going under,
Every word,
Makes my spirit die,
Every word,
Makes me softly cry,
I'm going under,
Every word,
A mirror of my tears,
Every word,
A shadow of my fears,
I'm going under,
Every word,
An unsung melody,
Every word,
A deep, lost memory,
I'm going under,
Every word,
A song of the night,
Every word,
A shadow over garish light,
I'm going under,
Every word,
Seemingly unspoken,
Every word,
My heart has awoken,
I'm going under,
Every word,
A pang of sorrow,
Every word,
A dark thought of tomorrow,
I'm going under,
Every word,
Makes me softly smile,
Every word,
Dries my tears for a while,
I'm going under,
Every word,
Touches you too,
Every word,
Reminds me, that I love you…
Author notes
EVANESCENCE GOING UNDER
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A contest entry
- An Abundance of Titles by Mad As Rabbits.
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I like it; especially the repetition. Great write--
♪ Dawn ♪
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This is such a wonderful piece of work! The imagery is outstanding. I also think you chose a perfect title for it.
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Every word made something click
This was a great write, it made me realize something I had been feeling for a while and now that it has come to me, the chains around my soul have loosened. Thank you
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Nice added touch to the repetitiveness off every word, makes you pay more attention to the words you are using to describe what your feeling. Nicely done.
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Wow, this is awesome!!! There is lots of emotion in this, and it's really beautifully written. The rhyme was very subtle but very good as well, it flowed nicely and didn't seem to be forced which is often my problem with some people that rhyme.
Thanks for entering.
Love Always,
Caroline
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wow!
who knew a word could mean so much? It seems to take a life of its own from being soothing to not helping and being helpful.
I would have thought the title to be "every word" but the title gives away that it is not just about the words and feelings but also about missing. The rhyme was executed brilliantly with me noticing only when I read it again. deep wite here. best of wishes in the contest! 
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