Wherever I walk
your presence wafts
like the first mingled scents
of Winter's thaw.
I know you,
for I stole
just a snippet
(like a lock of hair)
but nothing tangible.
How is it then
that when I cradle
a part of you,
each time I'm triggered
by a memory
I sense you close by?
We danced
like two butterflies,
with the intensity
of uncoiling springs,
yet there came a time,
when you felt like
you were falling into
a deep vortex,
out of control.
I've tried to understand
why the warmth turned to ice,
but I can't.
I'm sorry,
but I had to steal
just a fragment of you
to keep me sane.
Author notes
Prompt - you left this feeling here inside me
In a list
A contest entry
- you left this feeling here inside me by CarCrashHumor.
600 points, ended February 23, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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"Wherever I walk
your presence wafts
like the first mingled scents
of Winter's thaw.
I know you"
I love that first part
"How is it then
that when I cradle
a part of you,
each time I'm triggered
by a memory"
thanks for entering this! -
Wow, another grand entry hun...it's strange how people and things can leave different imprints in our hearts, well done sweets and goodluck in the contest
Karen
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Wonderfully penned for this contest. Some great metaphors and imagery as well. My favorite part...
I've tried to understand
why the warmth turned to ice,
but I can't.
I'm sorry,
but I had to steal
just a fragment of you
to keep me sane.
As well as the rest but this ending was perfect. Something I can relate to at this moment in my life.
Becky
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wow this is abeautiful write it holds deep emotion within your words that i could really feel. well done and best of luck gran
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