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Tonight's song

They wait for the death of the dawn to arrive

Screeches of sorrow wondering who will survive

They watch with their eyes tears of joy dripping down

Feasting on the time that the moon is around

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They smell the fear on your breath as you fall from grace

Feel the heat of your face with lavishing pace

Reaching inside they rip out your heart

Leaving you normal, not telling apart

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They wait for the death of the dawn to arrive

Casting their spells and shadow as they thrive

Herds of evil they gather and sing

Knowing the heartache tonight’s song will bring

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  • penman gold member
    December 31, 2007

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    Excellent

    Vivid clarity of intent and thought you have carved into the mind. Perfect sculptured verse for the picture. Best of luck in the contest.


  • raggyann
    December 30, 2007
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    dark and awsome is this poem
    something to ponder on
    great work


  • CherylAnn
    December 29, 2007

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    WOW

    This is amazing and the rhythm and rhyme are excellent...I love the eerie feel you portrait
    within the confines of your pen...A little different from your norm...yet so well done...A great walk on the dark side with you hun...
    Best of Luck
    Blessings
    ~~Cheryl~~


  • poetryality silver member
    December 28, 2007

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    The rhyme and flow is excellent, and the sense of darkness is quite evident through your wording. I love imagery that the poem gives to compliment the visual. I wish you well in the challenge. You've still got it girl!


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • Lily of the Valley
    December 28, 2007

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    This is a grippingly dark poem from you here as we watch the birds circling overhead. I think you've done justice to the picture and I can imaging the cold creepy sights and sounds created here. Good luck in the contest.


  • Michael A. de Melo
    December 28, 2007

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    dark and delicous

    I loved this picture and saw so many possibilities in it. I chose to use it to express my personal feelings, but you created a gripping tale. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.


  • PerfectImperfection
    December 28, 2007

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    A lovely piece of flowing rhyme - to enhance the thoughts taken from the image. Nice use of descriptives for effect of detail. Thank you for your entry!


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    December 28, 2007

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    oh wow laura this is an amazing write and take on the picture it says so much within it. well done and best of luck

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