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The Azure, Is Just A Touch Away













    as the ocean foam,
    the clouds blushed;

                and the cheeks
            of mother's moon,

    were thoughts away,

         

     
          I tired to touch









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  • vertigo beat
    January 2, 2008

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    - as the ocean foam,
    foamed?

    -bit confused about the use of mother. as in, your mother wasn't watching?

    overall, nice.


  • Cat gold member
    December 28, 2007
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    lovely poem
    congratulations on the shiny trophy..

    m


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    December 28, 2007

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    Oh wow ~ you've touched me once again with the magic of your words... Thanks ever so much for sharing this... x Love and light, Lavender Butterfly.