Mind lays in b-fib,
shocked by the truth
of the numbing lies administered
by your morphine dipped lips.
In a list
A contest entry
- One Amazing Stanza by Cherokee.
450 points, ended December 31, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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By your morphine dipped lips. My! This was more than awesome! You deserve two funny bunnies
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makes me want more... Well done.
~Pamela 
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Kudos
This is an excellent example of imagery and power. I really liked this - the last line was wonderful. Best of luck in the contest.
wolfie
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I had to look up b-fib. lol I'm an RN but I was thinking of the heart and thinking you meant A-Fib.
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this is wonderful.. seems such a rather sarcastic statement to say and to be honest i would bloody love to say i am "shocked by the truth
of the numbing lies administered
by your morphine dipped lips"
way to go girl i love it xxx
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Very strong and powerful piece...wow!
Well done!
Wishing you the best in this contest!!!
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Sis,
this is a very powerful verse that screams pain and anguish. Well done.
~lil bro~
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well done, I like this
(Too much time in hospitals!)
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Way too much time in hospitals is right
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