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Breath

I am a breath, held in until the lungs burn
and blackness creeps in, like the pits of Hell,
held in while seconds pass
and I am left with nothing but myself.
I am left with nothing but this breath.
     

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Eh, just writing to write, know it's not very good...

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  • Arcadiosiempre
    January 13, 2008
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    no ur wrong this piece is good!