I know you are that demon seed
that comes from hell below.
They whisper words of disapproval
everywhere I go.
I can see beyond the scrim
of darkened clouds that billow,
Please hold me closer still,
your chest as my soft pillow.
These flames of love that do arouse,
I cannot push them back.
I'll ignore their murmuring,
they've placed me under attack.
They do now know how willfully
I am in your embrace.
I won't let go, they have to know,
no matter the disgrace.
Your charm is overpowering,
and I am glad to fall.
Enchanter, you're my everything,
may day, my night, my all...
So let them scowl and turn their backs,
I will always be yours.
As far as I'm ever concerned,
each day our love matures.
A contest entry
- Can you Speak the words I can't find... by creationsfromheart.
650 points, ended December 28, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please be honest but be a teacher not a critic! Thanks!
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Awwww... man...this is dark and deliciously tempting. I have been temepted by the bad guy but my parents were the true gestapo and they were not having it. LOL
Now that I am grown, the "bad seed" was a bad decision. lol Great write though!
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How difficult it is to stay true to a love that brings you strife and seems that all those you would hold close would have nothing of it.
Be true to yourself above all else and when in doubt always trust your sixth sense.
I like it, I like it so!
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You had me from the first few lines.
I know you are that demon seed
that comes from hell below.
They whisper words of disapproval
everywhere I go.
Kinda scary though everyone should know what it feels like. I've had my share of demon seeds.
Easy read, nice flow. Thanks for sharing. Write on.
DEZ
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I see you haven't been on since 12/27. I hope all is well with you my dear but then I do know how busy we can get on the other side of this screen.
I think this is a wonderful take on the given prompt and for the life of me can see no misspelled words as the host pointed out that you have here. But don't mind me, I am not the best speller in the world. LOL
Brilliant work!
Take care dear heart ♥
Renee
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This is quite deep and lovely too! Sometimes we are overcome and things seem to be out of our control... You have described these emotions perfectly!
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this is beautiful Thank you so much
I thank you for entering this contest and I do love your write, however I do see some typo misspellings but this is a beautiful write my dear.
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