Heart hears your whisper
drifting into chasms
where the bear now walks.
A contest entry
- One Amazing Stanza by Cherokee.
450 points, ended December 31, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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That is it I am going to the bar and drinking all night Depressed because I will never be as brillient as you are. you get another f
unny bunny
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It is an amazing stanza. It has that punch in the poetry face and it has many many meanings. I bet by going to the contest I will know more, but still. I can't exactly say what it means and this wondering is good. Nice one, Pam!
~DD~
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This one fires my imagination--your three short lines convey all manner of poetic possibilities. Excellent.
Bill
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Oh, this is a delicious morsel.
I love the idea of the chasms, which also makes me think of the heart chambers. Simply scrumptious!
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Nice work in progress...I am sure you will take it some place great...for you always do...lovely work which could go many directions with more words...
Best to you!
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excellent
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Very nice Stanza and I like the way this expresses a feeling. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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This is wide-open and wonderous!
Simplicity to be explored deeply.
Blue
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leaves the imagination with lots of room to wander
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hmmmm... but it's a good hmmmm I think.
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Bears are notoriously hungry animals..
I liked this much.
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Nice!
I see you have given Cherokee--what is being desired. I am too used to thinking more in whole units than delectable snippets!
But You've done very well!
Best of Luck in the contest!
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I think the bears tracks will create a few chasms there while he is traipsing about. This was as amazing as you my dear friend. You say so much with every word you write. I love stopping by because I know I will always come away richer than when I stopped to read. I'm hearing a few whispers from my tummy right now telling me it's time to make some dinner. LOL My very best wishes for you with this it is golden like the ink which flows from your pen. Love you my friend, Joyce
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