bushels of neosticks
bundled
just right
all that’s left
deemed compost
Author notes
Fascism: Capitalist Dictatorship (George Bernard Shaw)
A contest entry
- Fascism in America by ecrivain01.
650 points, ended January 3, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Congrats on the trophy thingee, even more on catching how much is lost of the world when at the mercy of each ism. Politics is too often an expression of our fears instead of our hopes.
Love, Tom B.
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"neologisticks" might stick in the craw bigger and unbutter than "neosticks" - the which I did get stuck on, like a fortress embrasure defense feature, momentarily.
One might arrange the piece even more meaningfully by further giving little right shifts to lines 2 and 5, thus:
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bushels of neosticks
....... bundled
just right
all that's left
....... deemed compost
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[I use ... because the editor compacts spaces within comments...]
Such emphaisises "Bush" and all that...
Well done on the arranged short piece, with witty versification.
I realised the f-word were fascism before I read the note, so that too deserves my final of 3 plaudits.
Master Anarchy,
"Because you know you should."
. Rewarded 8
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Thanks, Master. I'm glad you saw "F-worded" for what it really meant.
I had the feeling that it would be seen as the obvious.
I appreciate your feedback.
Karin
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LOL
I almost fell out of my chair. This is simply fabulous. I'm still laughing so hard I'm having trouble typing and having to go back and retype some of the words.
Thanks for entering and Happy New Year.
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Thank you, Ecrivain. Glad it gave you some smiles.
Karin
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Very interesting, brave and wise used words in so short but strong poem. Best wishes.
~Sonja~
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Thank you, Sonja. Because it is so short, I wondered if the references were too obscure. At first glance one might not see what's underneath.
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