A fallen One, that never tried
The One who feels, his life has died
And never to be said again
His name of hallowed blackened pain
Emotions that cripple the life he once knew
The longing inside, to feel something new
So long ago, there was worth to his life
But now it appears he is living in strife
His soul is torn, his shadow won't follow
The One who is empty and broken and hollow
So sudden in moment, the loss of his mind
The One who will seek, but never will find
Destined to be, a Tortured Soul
The One who craves, to once feel whole
A life isn't living if you're longing for death
The feeling of failure, with each cursed breath
Love is a word, not ever a feeling
The falling of One, who is never done healing
Broke in the middle and split at the seams
The One who sleeps, but never dreams
Longing for numbness, to rid all the pain
Oh what could he do to feel normal again?
Speaking in silence and screaming in rhyme
His Exodus; just a matter of time
Author notes
I decribed myself for you
A contest entry
- Tell me about you by pinkstardust13.
525 points, ended December 28, 2007, 16 entries
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master piece
Your internal sadness fills my heart, I'm reaching desperately to hug you. Such a sadness matching my own, I'm holding back my tears. Your poem has left me speechless. I must crawl around your cave abit. Thanks for shareing.
@}~'~B
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You've described a few of us!
I also feel destined to be a tortured soul... this was a sad, dark and moving piece!
Immaculate flow and rhyme! Good to have found another Kiwi talent!
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brilliant! totally brilliant! and i so related to a lot of that poem, i have felt like that many times before.
awesome poem!
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Your poetry is amazing and reminds me of poems written by another fabulous poet, Aliceramone. I think you would like his writing. He hits hard with great vocabulary. AND so do you, fine Poet Sir!
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This is so wonderfully filled with dark emotion...my favorite lines...
Speaking in silence and screaming in rhyme
His Exodus;just a matter of time
Very moving to me...I have often thought some poetry does just scream...very nice job here!
Miss you...
Love~
Mom
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The emotion in this is really deep and this very well written. Truly amazing. good job, keep writing.
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Wow, I liked this a lot. Might have hit a little too close to home
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wow i think i like this poem the best out of all the ones of yours that i have read, i really enojoyed it
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it was so hard to judge this contest! i absolutely loved your poem. i wish i could give everyone a gold! that is how hard it was to decide. ty for entering!
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i really enjoyed your poem. however, i do think the rhyming life and strife is over used. i like the flow of the poem.
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Yea i agree bout the life and strife rhyming being overused, but its a personal poem about me, and my life, has had a bit of strife in it, so felt ok using it, it fits.
thanks for the comment
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It is better to be sad over something that is worth being sad about that to be happy over it which basically makes no sense. ...Love is a word, not ever a feeling... today that seems awfully true, I am sorry to say. Our lifetimes are but a breath inside infinity, which itself means nothing at all outside the continuum of space and time. While we are here we must try to make the best of life, sad or not. When it is done we will have an existence beyond any measure and imagination. I don't think it will be anything like what we have to endure in this plane. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
AD
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This makes me really sad. You seem not to be a very happy person, while you are such a good looking boy in your picture and a nice person as well, as I've got to know you. I definately hope that things will change for you soon. I wish you a very HAPPY NEW YEAR!
Anna.
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Thanks Anna and Chris
I'm used to my darkness, I don't hate having it, for it makes me creative, if i didn't feel this way I wouldn't be able to write 90% of the things I do, I can live with it, and it drives me.
Anti depressants used to make me numb but i struggle to ween myself off them and try to handle things my own way, so i allow myself to feel like this..
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Good. The medications only make things worse - they cure one disease and return a dozen others many of which are worse than the original disorder. Very good. You might want to check out these things on the internet; type in "monatomic gold" (including the quotes, "mono-atomic gold" (with the quotes and with and without the dash), orme and starfire. You may be amazed what these substances can do for you. I tried them and they work extremely well. I see you play the guitar. Check out a guy called Buckethead, to which I placed a link on my bio page. He is also a hardcore Gibson adept, although he uses the Les Paul most of the time. To me his music is soothing medicine
. Take care,
Chris
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