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Shipwrecked Love

My eyes can't see your face anymore
On my lips is only the taste of your lies
Your hands are too cold to touch
Your heart too cold to touch

I thought we could survive
The cold winter air
The heated summers
The in between states

Your hands are too cold to touch
Your heart too cold to touch

There's still a hole in the door
A bruise on my back
A scratch on your side
The anger misplaced

I thought we could survive
The cold winter air
The heated summers
The states in between

There's so much left unsaid
Sleeping alone again

Your hands are too cold to touch
Your heart too cold to touch

We're falling
In a state of abused love
The water rising
Above our heads
The shore out of sight

We took for granted
The love we shared
The anger tearing us
Apart
Drowning us

Your hands are too cold to touch
So cold

My skin is blue
My lungs collapsing
Yours are just the same
Sinking
Let us go together

Our hands are too cold
Clasped together

Love remembered
When circumstance
And consequence
No longer matter
No longer exist

Your hands pulling mine
Your heart was the only thing keeping me alive

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  • Luken gold member
    December 30, 2007

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    I totally understand what you're saying-- I've gone through the same thing recently... and after four years . But, I'm all good now . Everything will work out. I know you probably don't want my advice, so I will stop here. But, great poem. I really love how you're attached to this person and you're going down with them.

    If you would like to read about my experience, please read my poem "Once Again".

    Toodles,
    B. Lucas


    • facelessxfacade
      December 30, 2007
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      Thanks. I never turn down good advice, either. I will definitely check out your poem.


  • My unshed tears
    December 26, 2007

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    Hmmm I just wrote a poem that is somewhat like this so I know how you feel... I really like this.
    "My eyes can't see your face anymore
    On my lips is only the taste of your lies
    Your hands are too cold to touch
    Your heart too cold to touch" This is about where me and my partner are at the moment... so I get that completely. I do like how you have finished this though.
    "Love remembered
    When circumstance
    And consequence
    No longer matter
    No longer exist" This stanza... this gives me hope.

    • facelessxfacade
      December 27, 2007
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      Aye. It's about the point me and my partner are at too. I read your recent poem and I'll leave it comment on it there but it's rather brilliant. You're very talented with words. I'm glad you got the hope at the end, it's supposed to be like that... That's what it feels like to me. I hope things work out for you.