From the ashes she arrives
The scars ripping her apart
She'll never change her ways
He'll never change his gaze
Within the broken dream
This sweet misery
I never thought to feel
This way is forever doomed
In the tainted eyes
I set forth to find the lies
Every word spoken as truth
You know it's all from you
And as the tears fall once more
From some empty wells
She can't escape this hell
He can't control himself
And as the days stretch on
From lives that never should
She said she never could
He promised he never would
The tears streak down her face
Lines of dirt & pain
Staining her perfect face
Her eyes will always lie
His face shows no pain
Though his heart is fake
He'll never change his mind
He'll never stop to try
From the ashes they emerge
The dawning moon
And as the sun goes down
It will always be forever new
A contest entry
- Untitled. by warrior-eagle.
300 points, ended December 30, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Well....suppose you can give me something to work with?
Comments
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Powerful!
Powerful ending, like something out of a classic novel! However, if I had a favourite part, I'd have to say it's the second half of the first quatrian. I think that's the best part of this. But the whole thing carries a very powerful (yet sad) message...
And from reading your previous comment, I can't help but to wonder as well... What inspired this? Hmm... Phoenixes...
Nice work, truly enjoyed it.
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wow
omg that was simply amazing. wat inspired u to write that?
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