i lived your lies
but between the spaces
i became stronger
now i see you with different eyes
and i choke
because i was blinded
A contest entry
- Quote. by warrior-eagle.
650 points, ended January 2, 2008, 7 entries
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A powerful poem indeed.Well done
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Oh boy , how powerful! Been there, but there's a pot of gold at the end of a rainbow. No turning back fir thir girl!
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oh those were the days of total blindness..but now I see!! talented pen you have my friend.
GBY
SilverButterfly
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Oh YES!!!! Been here before!!! So horrible to wake one day and see them for what they truly are!!! Makes you just sick that you were suckered and taken in by them for any lenghth of time!!!!
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This does indeed remind people of their ex. Powerful stuff packed into so few lines.
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very good poem, this reminds alot of people of their ex's but it reminds me of my father, alot said in few words, well done.
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"i lived your lies
but between the spaces
i became stronger"
It is often those little spaces that let in the light of truth ... and open our eyes. Wonderful write! Best of luck in the contest!
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Amazing
This is powerful and so full of truth...When we finally realize that we were blinded to the truth it cause us to wonder why in the world we were so blinded in the first place...The choking is the reality of finally waking up...Truly powerful hun...
Best of Luck to you
Blessings
~~Cheryl~~
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Wow this is strong and powerful my sister
I love this amazing poem
Wonderful wonderful job
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this so much brought back memories of an ex lolol
this really is an outstanding poem which im sure will get a trophy very well done dear xx
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really good auntie
i love you
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between the lies one grows stronger and the blindness becomes the light...eyes are open and hearts mend*rose* very good! and thank you kindly for sharing with me*rose*
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now i see you with different eyes
and i choke
because i was blinded
You are quite true my friend..we all are in a process of revealation through the pains and the truths of life..it is a great piece here..
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WOW! So short yet so powerful. Amazing work. Absoultly fantastic. Great job and I wish you all the best in the contest.
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This are such powerful wors my friend.Often all of us or blinded by our loving hearts.
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So So True this is an excellent write Dear I wish you the best of luck in this contest I couldn't figure out what to write for it
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Good
This is very well penned with deep thoughts and a good imagination. The strength of your words and their message comes out well in this poem. The words flow with style and skill and roll their way from the page and into the reader's mind and they understand the feelings being portrayed.
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I like it. It's great. And it tells enough without going overboard. Determination runs through this short piece. Determination and regret. Well done my Sister. Wonderful writing.
Wayne Leon
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Sometime in our life we are all blinded by the truth of something. God luck in the contest.
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I don't understand the quote that this is based on. It is not my experience to understyand apparent bitterness in the wanting to choke, I guess. Fleetwood Mac does the song, Little Lies, and THAT I understand. I love that song.
I think I understand you poem, here, however. I admire the 'between the spaces' the most, because it is the spirit of transcendence, methinks.
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Well written thoughts of something we all have experienced. Blind eyes and hearts go hand in hand sometime. Excellent poem written from a dear heart!
My best to you.
Adam
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This is absolutely great. I loved the beginning of this poem. I loved the whole poem actually, but especialy the first two lines. Well done and all the best for the contest.
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