Oh God
I know you are the only affinity here on this earth
and, If I acknowledge you
then everything else is a fruitless term
while nothing is futile
especially when you are the architect behind
I know then what you do
to make me acquisitive of your fabrications?
you magnetize me through the squaws
as your masterful wholesales executives
influencing me towards your contrasts
Oh God...
A contest entry
- Quickie Adult Pic Inspired by WillAlwaysLove.
550 points, ended December 27, 2007, 7 entries
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this is wonderful and has a spritical and great message. I love your form and woding. this is amazing.
*peace*
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Wow! This was ingenious; how you transformed this into something spiritual and spearheaded how consummerism is corrupt and drives people away from knowing the Divine.
"you magnetize me through the squaws
as your masterful wholesales executives
influencing me towards your contrasts"
How wonderfully you point out that it is through these very contrasts that we are either driven away from knowing God or come closer to him, once we realize the futility of everything else that hypnotises us. Throughout your piece you never let us forget that the Divine is the "architect" behind everything, and that it is through these very contrasts that we come to know
this. Best of luck in the contest!
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Nice penn, very different and quite enjoyable. I feel when a poem is different than my style, it makes for a wonderful poem. Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.
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Wowzers!!
Oh My Word what a Piece You have penned based on this picture inspiration
Oy!!
what images to stain the Mind~~
while nothing is futile
especially when you are the architect behind
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and voice!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Wow...deep metaphor here with the contrasts of the divine being light AND dark...interesting how you make the covetous eye part of a sales objective, I found that quite funny yet poignant. I do so love the wrap around of 'Oh God', it gives the 'push' to the emotive quality of desire you have written so well here. Best of luck in the contest. I very much enjoyed this read, thought provoking. Peace, Rhonda
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