To be or not to be?....
that is the question.
bulimic or not?
I fill me up with sweets
then purge them all away
Then starve myself to pieces
and won't eat the following day
I hate to be discreet
it will take me at all bane
I wish I led a different life
I wish to be more sane
there are two sides within me
one to make me eat
the other ones the devil
which brings me to defeat
I listen quite intently
to the voices in my head
but if I heed to the wrong one
I'll surely end up dead
so I"ll try to listen to the one
that lifts my spirits high
not the one who hates me
and leaves me left to die.
Author notes
option #4/ Option#2 for contest Emotion crying out/ "Let's throw up all thees insecurities"
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The confusion in this poem kinda reflects the
way people with eating disorders feel,like you wanna get
better,but you dont wanna stop.in having that in your poem reflects what i asked for,so good on you for that,
on the cons side,i personally am not very taken with rhymes,and this kind of formatt and writing just doesont
really catch my attention or grab me that particularly.
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T_T i've been through this.. i know how it feels
i've only just overcome my bulimia in the past few weeks so i'm here for you if ever you need someone...
good luck
and thanks for entering this is beautiful and sad -
wow, that was really good. Sorry for your struggle, but your dffinetly on your way to victory! XD
Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest -
thank you for let us share in your struggle. i am sorry you've had to go thru this, but everything happens for a reason.
i think my favorite part of this is "there are two sides within me
one to make me eat
the other ones the devil
which brings me to defeat
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You are on your way to victory..
the poem reads well with a good flow!
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I love the way that you have chosen to write this piece as you have taken the mind and thoughts of someone who is ill and twisted them into a poem which really allows the reader to feel connected to the write as well as gaining a better insight as to how a person who ill thinks. wonderfully written well done
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This is so amazing in its power and flow. You wrote about bulimia so tastefully, which I admire. I think I'll bookmark this poem; it definitely deserves a second read.
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i used to do this...ok i still do...your poem has so much beauty in it. great job! thank you for entering
and best of luck to you!
NineTailedFox -
Thank you for entering this poem to my contest. It was a very moving poem,and the confliction within it was superbly spoken. Thanks for this poem, and the concept of it was very well written.
Good luck in the contest and best of wishes.
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I appreciate you commenting on my piece. Your words of wisdom are truly appreciated. Have a wonderful day
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Very well written. Thank you for sharing and entering the contest. Good luck.
♥
whisper
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With pieces like this describing the diagnosis, there is a thin border between success and failure, i feel you're going to beat it, forget about snacks, just 3 square meals and lots of laughter at AP,
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Thanks my friend
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VERY good rhyme and rhythm. I love how you expressed this dilemma in words. Thoughtful and mindful words. It's such a personal subject and your poem is very deep and descriptive of it.
I feel, though, that this relates only to this personal issue than you yourself. Maybe it's not best for this contest, but for another. That's just my personal opinion.
Nicely written, sunflower.
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Sweet I love this poem it rocks!!!
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Thanks for the lovely compliment. It is much appreciated.
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Oh God! This poem has me just blown away! You took the words within your heart and wrote them down so wonderfully. At the same time, this is so very sad and deep. I am always here for you, remember this! I love you my friend and when you need to be lifted up on high, I will be right here
all my love!
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well, there are mnay who can lift your spirits, i just hope that i am one of them and you'll not drift away from the improvements we hope are getting you back on track,. Lovely work!
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Thank you for such sweet words. You do lift me up, more then you know. I only hope you know what you mean to me. You are a true friend which I admire so greatly
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