$pend me $pend me
I grow on tree$
$ave me $ave me
for future ea$e
$poil me $poil me
Daddy Plea$e!
$ta$h me $ta$h me
$o the fed$ dont $ieze
$erve me $erve me
be my $lave.
Author notes
I don't know if I like this or not, Oh well, I couldn't resist.
A contest entry
- $ by sheltered.
525 points, ended December 28, 2007, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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An honest citique is well accepted
Comments
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Thanks for the entry real tough but in good rhymes..
Godbless in the contest!!! -
Hey! I like this poem. It's short and cute. I like the rhyme. Thank you for your entry in my contest.
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Well done my man! Ssaying much with little words...
DEZ
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congrats on the bronze!
well done!
love the dollar sign 's' you incorporated into this...
creative!!! that thought would have never occured to my febble mind...LOL!
excellent!
Blessings! Tammy
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I like this a lot, the ideas you've presented and the way you've written it (especially with the $'s). I guess I didn't like the last stanza as much, it's probably there for the punch effect of the last line, but it just seems a bit out of place (to me) without a rhyme...I like the actually lines though.
Good luck in the contest and take care! x
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I like it a lot.
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Excellent
Very creative and well expressed. Great take on the prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
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Good write. Managing money is such a balancing act. Stash it and you're miser. Spend it and you could end up bankrupt. So many attitudes about $$$
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Oh and just thought I'd point out that you have 3 Ss in "stash" instead of 2...
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I love it! You've really captured the essence, I guess, of money.
The rhyme and rhythm is great - it flows wonderfully. I think the fact that the last stanza doesn't rhyme really makes it stand out! And I think the $s in place of the Ss were a great idea!
Fantastic write!
Hugs and bubbles... x
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