Sleep hits like rain
like a thousand pores sweating,
chains of sorrow pull
unforgiving tears
downward;
and the memories of you
consume me.
Pools of unconscious thoughts
black out traces
of reminiscence,
drowning this face in
agony;
and the memories of you
replace me.
Fighting the remembrance
to let go of your withering hands,
I will wash away these tears
with dreams you don't
exist in;
and the memories of you
escape me.
Author notes
Note for the title:
water in this case means tears.
balloon is another definition for forget.
releasing tears to forget the past.
A contest entry
- everything and anything by x Bright Eyes x.
525 points, ended February 4, 2008, 84 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
let the imagery embrace your soul
Comments
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Beauty is in the spacing, and in the linage here. Love the way you end each stanza... It leaves you so.. tired.. so sad... mourning...
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Beautiful... absoulutly amazing. I love the imagary. Great job, and best wishess in the contest!
~Wishing you a happy and healthy new year,
Jade aka Ms.Misery -
such a deep, sad story. i can feel your pain in this one. Best of luck in the contest.
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such sad and vicious write that we have all experienced.
you write with a deep dedication from a withered torn heart that has been lashed like a teenager in puppy love.
hope you receive a trophy for this awesome write
Tamara
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I don't appreciate you saying my write is like teenagers in puppy love because it is strictly more than that, but thanks for the rest of your comment
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