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The Lady Of The Forest

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               ~*~

She is a lady of the forest,
A woman of the trees,
With leaves grown in her hair,
That flutter in the breeze.
Her trunk is tough and gnarly -
To protect the heart within;
A mighty outward shell,
That clothes her ashen skin.
Her love for nature’s endless,
Unwavering and pure,
So much so she has become,
Part of which that she adores.
A soft glow lightly emanates,
From her body and her face,
Which, behind a barky mask,
She has duly placed.
Her green eyes can still be seen,
And from red lips she sings,
Lullabies and fantasies,
That attract birds in the spring,
And all manner of other creatures,
For which she provides a home,
But when in summer, they move away,
She is left standing on her own.
Apart from random passer’s by,
Who use her for the shade -
Laying upon her twisted roots,
Amongst the grassy blades.
As time moves into autumn,
Her beauty grows and grows;
Full of lustrous auburn colours,
She magnificently shows.
Though good things never last,
And they start to drop and fall,
Leaving her vulnerable and naked,
Against winter she stands tall.
The wind that once washed through her hair,
Now beats her body around,
And though ice and snow may crack her skin,
She never does back down.
For she remembers that if she stays,
Life will soon transcend,
Onto her branches in the spring,
As the cycle starts again.

              ~*~

Author notes

I really really really hope you like this because I really enjoyed writing it and your picture just inspired me so much! It's Option 1, the third picture (though I guess that's pretty obvious). Good luck with your contest, take care! x

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  • ecrivain01 silver member
    July 22
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    Yes, but this line needs changing:

    Part of which that she adores. (Part of that which she adores), and passersby is one word.
  • This has so many trophies. I am impresssed, all of them were well deserved, cause this is amazing. Thanks for entering.
  • whoopie.x
    April 15
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    GREAT
  • Well i see you've had some success with this poem. I like it, and the picture as well although i read that it isn't of your choosing. Thanks for the read, i hope you don't mind m raising a question about line 12. The order of words appears to be mixed. but i could be wrong.
    • I see what you mean but it can be said like that, or Part of that which she adores, either way

  • suseann
    March 28

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    She never does back down.
    For she remembers that if she stays,
    Life will soon transcend,
    Onto her branches in the spring,
    As the cycle starts again.
    This regenerational promise is a favorite part for me. Nice work.


  • WhiskeyandInk
    March 28

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    What an amazing poem! I love the vision of the cycle of life here, and the imagery is stunning! The flow is emotional and sweet, making for an overall success! Well done!

    Keep Quilling,
    Whiskey

  • I've always loved this image, great inspiration. The poem is just exquisite. It intricately weave such splendor, how could you not love it.
  • I haven't even read the poem yet but wow, that is one awesome picture, and obviously a great poem judging by the amount of trophies on it... Off to read the poem, had to comment on the picture first though, I was so awed when I saw it lol
    Wow... Just read the poem, and I'm awed by that too, I'm speechless, everything I could say I'm sure has already been said to you...
    Great job, good luck in my contest
    And congrats on all the other trophies

  • xDamagedx
    February 27

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    Wow...beautiful! :-) This was full of imagery, I love it.

    Thanks for entering,a nd best of luck to you.

    xxx

  • De-Throned
    February 19
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    good poem i like your take from the picture. Good luck int he contest

  • Elavina
    February 7
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    Thanks for entering it in the contest. . .silver trophy!

  • Elavina
    February 7

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    Gorgeous

    This is one well crafted poem. The beauty of nature is so Lovingly displayed here, simply put it's a mastery of words. The flow is constant, and the beat is defiantly there. I look forward to reading more of your work if I can. Feel free to send me a message now and then.

  • M a r l u x i a
    January 30

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    This is a wonderful description of both a fantasy and realistic figure. It can be idenitfied as a tree as well as using a fantasy element (referring to it as if it were a female) with it. Vvid description, good flow, and good rhyme. Keeps a good beat.



    Thanks for entering your write at A N Y T H I N G ~ G O E S ! Good luck!



    M a r l u x i a

  • sweetpea112788
    January 30

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    Your poem is astounding . .

    You got my attention as the judge. The description is well played how winter comes and she stand s tall. This is a nice little piece. I enjoyed it. Thank u 4 entering my contest. Let the best tale win shall we?


  • leander gold member
    January 26

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    Ooh, what a very beautiful picture you have here, and a great poem with it in fact You have a wonderful and steady flow throughout the piece, that is maybe a tad bit wobbly towards the end.
    Apart from that, you did very well!

    Leander

  • Sekhmet Kitty
    January 24
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    Excellent write, loved it. such beauty captured into words.


  • whispernthedark gold member
    January 23

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    This is truly an amazing write, and that picture is just awesome. Congratulations on your many trophies on this piece, it is truly deserving. Best of luck in the contest.


    whisper

  • mackereth
    January 22

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    wow, this is an amazing poem, i like how you not only used the picture of the woman as part of the tree, but you also put what the woman feels about the seasons and how they affect her, thanks again for your support with my contest, your generosity is rare in our society it seems.


    • She Has My Heart
      January 22
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      Thanks for your great comment and applause

      It's hardly generosity, you're the one going to the trouble of raising awareness by holding a contest, but I know what you mean about our society...it is quite sad how things are going at the moment...

  • Deus Proteje
    January 17

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    Nice piece

    I liked the piece, but the rhyme scheme greatly wavered at times, as did your use of language.

    I did enjoy the poem, the imagery was rich, and it is yet another lovely piece that helped signify a love of nature.

    Good luck in my contest.

  • Heavenly Angel
    January 16

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    Truly, a most awesome write!
    Love the use of metaphor and imagery..wow!
    Very, very well done!
    Thank you for sharing!

  • Violet Blossom
    January 15

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    Fun and satisfying to read and a lovely, inspired write on the image. So inventive and smart.


  • aboomer silver member
    January 14
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    First off, congrats. on the well-deserved trophies!
    This was very lovely. I like the picture you painted. There are a few spots that weren't as smooth, but on the whole it read nicely. Great wording and images.
    thank you for your entry.
    best wishes.


  • pappacass
    January 11
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    loved it

    this is one of the best i read all day..thank you and good luck
  • ***

    This is a lovely piece, it was all my pleasure to read it, thanks for entering it

  • potanical
    January 9
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    Lovely poem and a well deserved winner. Congratulations on the gold trophy.

    Ann


  • Abe 1
    January 8
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    fantastic well done thanx 4 the entry abe
  • I do like this poem and your description of autumn is one which I think of all too often. Autumn is the best time of year for me. Thank you so much for adding this poem to my contest. The very best of luck to you. xXx

  • DrunkenRam
    January 6

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    This is sWEEET!, I Like it, it is the only Tree that speaks to me as there are a lot of tree poems out there.
    this is the one I will use a reference when thinking on a tree.
    well done.


  • infinitechaos07
    January 6
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    Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!
  • ecrivain01 silver member
    January 6

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    Now this is not bad ..

    but you do have some problems:

    Part of which, that she adores. (Part of that which she adores)

    passersby, not passer's by

    Leaving her vulnerable and naked,
    But against winter she stands tall. (remove "But")

    She never once does back down. (never once backs down)

    Aside from those things, this is a good poem. Actually, personifying a tree is an interesting idea, and you've followed through with it perfectly to my way of thinking. I'm impressed.

    Fix the problems before the contest ends and let me know when they are fixed.

    • I fixed 1,3 + 4 (though 4 differently to what you said), but 2 I felt was better as it was because I wanted it to be plural. Now you know which poem was mine x

  • Midoriko
    January 4

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    I like this. it's very good. I love the imagery! it's so good! keep up your amazing work! best of luck in all of these contests. Congrats on your silver trophy! keep up your amazing work!!! Thanks for entering my contest.!

    Crimson
  • EasyReader
    January 3

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    Wonderful

    I can't imagine anyone doing this picture more justice than you've done here. This really is a perfect marriage of picture and words. But even without the picture, the poem would be great on its own merits. In fact, without the picture, I can imagine that this poem represents the stages of life people go through as they get older. There are a lot of layers to this poem. I think we could probably analyze it to death. Suffice to say that it is really extraordinary.

    • Haha thank you very much or your comment and applause. I know what you mean by "analyse it to death" - I hate it in school when we do poetry and that's what happens. Glad you enjoyed it take care x

  • islekine
    January 2

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    Thanks for your entry!

    I love the picture too...I entered the same contest, same picture option...yours is much better!
    Write on!
    *PEACE*
    Happy New Year!

    • Thanks for your comment and applause, Happy New Year to you too! x

      Oh and I'm sure it's not good luck with your contest and in the other one! x take care x

  • mommyof2
    January 2

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    Wow, a truly enjoyable read overflowing with vivid imagery...Your words outdid the pic, and the progressing through seasons made for an excellent piece of poetry. ~mommy

  • lol, Can't I just repeat what Ian said? About when you not being the nature person?
    I read this when you first posted, read it when you edited [the picture] and read it in an attempt to comment
    Today I shall finally comment and it's pathetic how all my comment is really saying is about making comments on a whole as I write this comment, but sometimes commenting is a chore and you already know the poem is brilliant and this time I agree with the flow so that's all I have to say in the comment that I'm commenting.

    End of Comment.
    Never ♥


  • brightredtulips
    December 31, 2007

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    This is fabulous. You have painted a picture far better than the one that inspired this. This piece is so full of beauty and shine, but it doesn't boast, it is just there, ready to be read and filled with wonder. My imagination was going crazy while I read this, just picturing all of these things you describe perfectly. It is no wonder why you got silver, this is absolutely a finalist.
    Thank you for entering and all the best in the judging.

    Happy New Year!
    ~kate-flamingo

  • Knight70
    December 30, 2007

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    Damn!!!!

    Congratulations on the silver, George! What a gorgeous take on the picture prompt! It's so cool how you brought personification to the image on a whole new level. When I read this aloud, I am reassured that you have this undeniable gift for rhyme and rhythm, and it is chock full of luster and beauty. I continually learn something new from reading your work. It never fails to inspire me to keep writing. Don


    • She Has My Heart
      December 30, 2007
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      Aww thanks very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it! This one mostly just flowed out of me (when I was supposed to be working, typical!) Take care and thanks for the applause! x

  • W a s p
    December 30, 2007

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    So...

    hungry for your "nature" poetry, this has filled the "Tummy" of the mind. I remember when nature stuff was not you... now you are natural nature person, you seem to have no trouble at all with your words. U.F.I.


    • She Has My Heart
      December 30, 2007
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      Haha the tummy of the mind, I like that!

      And a natural nature person hehe

      Thanks for the comment and applause! x

  • BermudaHighway
    December 29, 2007

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    I love your use of personification in this. To those who may stand apart from nature, you open a doorway of empathy into all the things that this tree endures and you build a most lovely metaphor around her. The rhythm and rhyme in this is polished to the 'nth degree, and your descriptive words are so dang darn beautiful that I'm just not sure what to say that would do them justice. You've offered up another thing of pure beauty, adding one more reason to be proud of your tremendous body of work. Bravo, sir.


    • She Has My Heart
      December 29, 2007

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      Aww you are always too kind! I am glad you liked it ^^

      It's funny that the rhyme and rhythm seem so polished when most of it just sort of...came...it's the best when that happens

      Thanks for your wonderful words and applause x take care! x

  • TheGreatestLove
    December 28, 2007

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    THANKS SO MUCH FOR THIS

    "Her green eyes can still be seen,
    And from red lips she sings,
    Lullabies and fantasies,
    That attract birds in the spring,"

    Painted such a beautiful picture.

    it


    • She Has My Heart
      December 29, 2007
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      Hehe aww thanks for your great comment and applause x good luck with your contest and take care! x

  • second-born
    December 27, 2007

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    wow...this is truly an awesome piece...I could imagine the lady herself standing pround on the forest...I loved the natural flow and its vivid images...a captivating write indeed!!!


  • OneSoul
    December 26, 2007

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    Aww as a nature-lover, I really enjoyed this piece. Trees are such a magnificent part of nature and don't always receive the respect they deserve, so I loved that you were able to bring out their greatness in this poem!
    Sorry that it's been such a long time since I've read your poems! But it looks like with vacation week, I'll be able to spend some more time on the computer. And I have a few new poems to post as well!
    Anyway, great job with this one! I hope to comment on some more soon.

  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    December 26, 2007

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    "The wind that once washed through her hair,
    Now beats her body around,
    And though ice and snow may crack her skin,
    She never once does back down."

    Absolutely enjoyable poet, a real treat to read. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Random Goldfish gold member
    December 26, 2007

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    This is amazing! It's right from a story book!

    I adore it! I love how it goes through all the seasons and it all transended like magick. I couldn't have asked for a more lovely poem.

    Thank you, lovely!
    Thanks for entering,
    Best Wishes,
    ~Mairéad~


    • She Has My Heart
      December 26, 2007
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      So glad you like it!

      Thanks for your wonderful comment and applause, take care x
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