When your caring and daring,
For a cup of love and sharing,
Cuz puppy love is what makes you smile.
When your hoping and dreaming,
and your heart is screaming,
You've wanted this for a while.
You need it, you feed it,
and you can't believe it -
You've got a million mountains to climb.
You want it, you've got it,
and you can't live without it -
Cuz you know that the girl blows your mind.
You're in love,
No one knows it like you do
You're in love,
Oh you're in love, love, love.
And you know it when she smiles at you.
When your sleeping and praying,
You know that your hair is graying,
That love might just slip away.
It's numbing, but something,
and all together nothing
Can keep you from being that way.
You need it,you feed it,
and you can't believe it,
Why does it have to be this way?
You want it, you've got it,
and you can't live without it -
Cuz you know that the girl blows your mind.
You're in love,
No one knows it like you do
You're in love,
Oh you're in love, love, love.
And you know it when she smiles at you.
When you're walking and talking,
And you feel like nothing
has ever made you feel this way
You fumble and mumble,
Cuz the words got you in a jumble,
She's just another mountain away.
You're willing and daring,
For a cup of hugs and sharing,
Cuz puppy love is what makes you smile.
You want it, you've got it,
and you can't live without it -
Cuz you know that the girl blows your mind.
You're in love,
no one knows it like you do,
You're in love,
Oh you're in love, love, love.
And you know it when she smiles at you.
And no one knows it like you do.
Something grabs you by the wrist
she settles with a kiss
She's going to take you over
You know she sees right through
The sweetest heart in you
She wants to hold you closer
Something grabs you by the arm
she huddles close cuz your warm
No one knows that you love her
Seeing in her eyes you've got her heart
And in her arms, your not
Anything but good.
Author notes
I can't remember exactly how I wanted this to go before, but I'm pretty sure this way is better
A contest entry
- Speaking from your heart - Image prompt by m2lost24get.
800 points, ended January 12, 2008, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
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Bryan, Congratulations on winning the silver here. This one read like a love song and I like the style in which it was written. The only thing that tended to make me falter was the use of the word "cuz". Such wonderful poetry that was interrupted by that slang word. All in all it was beautiful and richly deserving of the award it received. Thank you for sharing with all of us. Love and God bless, Joyce
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Asdzaa Nadleehe
Thank you so much!
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sunny day
I know that I tend to fall back on 'cuz' alot It's such a simple word, but it fits. Thank you so much, and I totally disagree! It's just... luck? Yeah, luck that got me silver XD Thanks so much!!! -
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With words like yours that wasn't luck Bryan. Don't be modest when it comes to your writing. It was a beautiful piece. Even with the word "cuz". LOL 
And I think you better take another look at your replies here. You sent Asdzaa Nadleehe's to me instead. 
Have a wonderful day. Love and God bless, Joyce rose*
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A very beautiful and heartfelt write...
Beautiful silver..smiles
Peace and many blessings
~A~
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well done with true beauty of the compassion of love within your heart. the smile of true love speaks profoundly loud as when i was with my ex love i could feel the essence of his smiling when we were together that often melted our spirits sending thoughts so much closer to our hearts. thank you for entering and many blessings always xx
* as for what you had said in the author notes I'd love to see the full version write as I placed the line limitations to 100 lol best wishes always *
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m2lost24get
Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it ^.^
Really? Oh cool, I'll get back to working right away
Thanks again!
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Aw, Bryan, this is so heartfelt! And so truthful and brilliant! It'd make a brilliant song, I know it.
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