Help me now!
I can't live one more day.
I'm withering away.
I'm dying slowly,
taking my last breath.
I have nothing else to live for,
I'm nothing but a wreck.
I only bring pain.
I am only a mistake.
I'm wishing I was never born.
I'm only fixing this mistake.
I want to grab the razor,
I'm going to slit my wrist,
but that not enough,
and it is to slow.
So I grab the gun,
put it to my head.
I hold it tightly,
my hands are sweaty.
My heart is pounding
I'm doing this for you.
I'm going to die.
So I pull the trigger,
And let the hearts fly...
Author notes
ThexWhitexRabbit
A contest entry
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I hope you know this is JUST a poem...
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Only one thing with this the word dieing is actually spelled dying. this was great ND TAHNKLS FOR ENTERING.
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That was definitely very powerful. Good luck!
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Sigh....
I know you're writing this to release angst and frustration, and because in its own strange way, suicide seems so beautifully tragic.
I have to tell you though, my friend shot himself in the head last October - and it's not beautiful. Just in case you are considering actually doing this (and yes, I admit I held a gun to my head last August, so call me a hypocrite) - DON'T DO IT! It's not pretty.
Okay, enough of the lecture - on to the poem. You had a few spelling errors: S2L1: it should be "dying"
S2L4: "wreak"? I think you meant "wreck", etc...
Thanks for the entry and I hope this was just an expression of angst and nothing more...
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Welcome to AllPoetry
I think way too many including myself have at least felt this way, you have conveyed many feelings that young people these days do not know how to deal with. A grand piece here
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