Once there was a village girl, with a forbidden love.
The parents said their son’s love, she was unworthy of.
As time went on, their feeling got stronger, grew.
So they would sneak around, even though it was taboo.
They would make love, laugh and play.
Dream of a future, and swim in the bay.
Then one day their secret was revealed.
Torn away from each other, fates sealed.
One night he found an easy escape.
And rode a canoe around the cape.
He made one stop to get his girl.
Together they would travel the world.
The thunder roared, a storm from above.
Giant waves took away her beloved.
In search of love she was obsessed.
She refused to ever give up her quest.
Swimming on and on, she sprouted a tale.
Deeper she swam, nothing, to no avail.
For her lost love, she swims the sea.
Listen carefully, you may hear her plea.
Author notes
Even in real life, people keeping searching for lost love.
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- Fantasy of The Sea * Picture Inspired by ennovy.
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Very sad tale of love. Beautifully written. Really enjoy it. "Deeper she swam, nothing, to no avail.
For her lost love, she swims the sea." so sad. Thanks for the emotion.
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Many times our loves are twisted by cruel turns, it happened twice in your tale. First it was the taboos, and then it was the storm. Hard won, deep love, cast asunder once again.
Thank you so much for entering our contest.
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Enchated love at the sea....marvelous.
Good luck my sister.
Ephiphany
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This was a very sweet and romantic tale (no pun intended). Sweet and heart felt. Good luck Precious...... Michael
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Brutal love story..... I like that she's turned either by determination or by divine power into a mermaid to search for her love...
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What a beautiful love story you have composed. The concept is just awesome...and you don't have to use my picture..just as long as its a mermaid or merman.
Thanks for entering..........novy
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The words that you use to rhyme are powerful and beautiful.
Lost at Sea happens to be the title of one of my favourite songs, so I was immediately intruiged to read this.
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