A flash of grace, a whisper of light -
flutter of wings just taking flight.
Delightful smiles hid behind,
fingers laced and entwined.
Button nose, green eyes,
that they use to
hypnotise.
Golden
hair
falls
around,
shoulders bare,
Without a sound,
And without a care.
Silken skin, glowing white,
Against the dark of the night.
In turquoise dress, a sight pristine -
A charming princess, so rarely seen.
Author notes
My first real attempt at any sort of form that isn't a sonnet (and I only have 4 of those). I hope you like it, I really enjoyed writing it, but I have read the other entries in your contest and they are amazing!
Oh the form is a Nonet 9 syllables, then 8, 7 etc, and I guess the second part is a reversed Nonet, 1 then 2, 3 etc
In a list
A contest entry
- Fantasy!! by TwiztidMaggot.
600 points, ended January 20, 2008, 26 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-writes & Fresh Writes Welcome Here! by LadyUnique.
300 points, ended January 17, 2008, 65 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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When you're good ...
you're good. However, this is just so filled with cliches .... and the final line is very weak.
well, anyway, it'll do. Fortunately, it wasn't in one of my contests, so I don't have to go into all that. -
Too fun!
This was a treat to read, I enjoyed the subject matter and imagery, nicely done rhyme scheme and the form was a refreshing change. Thanks for entering. -
I'm not sure if I mentioned how much I loved the shape to this piece, it really compliments your words.
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I like the wording . .
How it went larger to smaller than larger haven't thought of that. Goodluck in my contest.
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nice and floating really how i like it at times, the hourglass shape was also a cool way of display, it gave me ideas :-)
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this is very sweet and the form you've used works perfectly. i only write free-form. reading a poem like this has that little voice in my head saying 'try form poetry!'
thank you for entering and best of luck
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Or maybe this whole thing can be called a mirror-nonet?
I'm not really home in form poetry so I've no idea actually - lol 
anyway, it's amazing how you managed to get rhyme in this form as far as I know 'something' about it, they don't really need that, not?
anyway, thank you for entering the contest - I wish you the best of luck!
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Mirror nonet sounds cool!
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This is very good. I love the form you put this in! It is very wonderfully written! keep up your amazing work! best of luck in these contests! You are a finalist in mine!
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Thank you very much, I am glad you enjoyed it x
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Bravo! I am just tickled with this wonderful Double Nonet with its wonderfully enchanting message. I can tell you had fun with this one. A pure delight. Wonderful entry. Simply splendid. ~Pamela
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Aww thank you very much for your wonderful comment and applause and for placing me in the finalists for this was my first attempt at a nonet. I am glad you enjoyed it x
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I loved the shape of this poem.
REALLY COOL
Imagery was really good, however, i felt the flow was a little choppy in some areas..
thanks for entering
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Yeah, it was my first attempt at this form, but thanks for the good comment and applause! x
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Vivid description, very captivating.
Nice job in mirroring the form.
Blue
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Excellent entry--well-worded and structured and I like the reversal.
Bill
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Thank you very much for your coment and applause! x
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Excellent
WOW!
What an excellent piece of poetry.
Well done.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you for sharing.
*S* Cynthia -
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Aww wow thank you for your wonderful comment ^^ take care x
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wow.
fxcking wow.
amazing.
BRILLIANT!
this has gotto be excellent. I hate shape forms - they always sound so stupid restricted to the diminishing or adding syllable count. But this, coupled with a fantastic rhyme scheme. To hell with the subject of fairies man - I LOVE this.
In fact, I'm adding it to a list.
Like it or not, I'm keeping this poem.
And if I ever get to make one as well, damn - I may never be able to beat this!
Never ♥
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Not really sure how to make an embarrassed face on here...*embarrassed* lol, but wow, thanks for your amazing comment!!
I never really was into forms either...but I just felt I had to write this ^^
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I believe is blush, let's try
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It worked!
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so magical x
i love thee x
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Hehe aww thanks ^^ I love you x
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