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Nocturnes: Unwritten / Unspoken

 

 

This is the poem I cannot speak outloud
where hidden niches sit inside layers of stanzas,
unfolding without redundant thought.

I am the calligraphy nib dipped in blue-black ink

writing out in swooping illuminations,

blessed illusions of splendour, hopeful

secrets fill this parchment.

Can you fold me into seven parts?

Fold after fold, making me smaller,

so small that this poem will all but disappear.

Only a hushed whisper of it will remain.

Words that will stumble out like a child falling down,

grazing their lip or knees, these words want to cry from this page -

awaiting that soothing touch.

Then: Has this poem mentioned love yet?
or the passion that made it spill out
onto this empty white page?

                  well you know, that this poem is for you.
                                                                 

                                                               
Writing quietly
on my bed
in my room
alone
half empty
half lit
cautioned to the night sky-
slivered through the curtains

spending itself upon my naked heart.


The dark mystery

of you and this poem
become words

I cannot speak.



 

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For Him ........... Michael Thomas

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  • pine-needles
    December 30, 2007

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    this says a lot, even if you can't speak it out loud. smooth, and the images are perfect, vividly developed and fitting. especially love
    "Words that will stumble out like a child falling down,
    grazing their lip or knees, these words want to cry from this page -
    awaiting that soothing touch."
    wow.

    there is a dramatic shift following "Then: Has this poem mentioned love yet," both in style and structure, seems almost to be its own poem. not too fond of the italics, especially the first phrase, where the comma also throws me off. but otherwise, i'm rather fond of the second part as well, sort of a catchy rhythm to
    "on my bed
    in my room
    alone
    half empty
    half lit"
    almost a chant, the "dark mystery."

    but the sudden shift in tone, the whole feel of the two parts, disjointed and both feeling unfinished or cut off abruptly. i don't know. it was unsettling, left me a bit unsatisfied. don't know if i'm making any sense. but really lovely, excellent writing. glad i came across this.


  • Cat gold member
    December 28, 2007

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    this is so intensely personal, so intensely unresolved, so intensely beautiful- i know i say this all the time to you- but i think you've written your finest.. again
    and again
    and again

    lovely lovely

    m


  • Heart Sutra
    December 27, 2007

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    Well, this is definitely full of love, intensity and the un-name-able feeling that strikes deep into the heart and leaves one folded in silence. Excellent, heart wrenching and compelling.


  • Nicolette gold member
    December 26, 2007

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    Can words carry the burden, can we arrange them to speak for us.... sometimes, yes... sometimes the burden's on us. I so love this poem... what it speaks of but also the quiet inbetween. One of your best, my friend... the eye and the heart of the poet, the calligraphy and the origami - written and unwritten, folded and unfolded. Beautiful - and yes, that last stanza....



    ~ Nicolette


  • m2lost24get
    December 26, 2007

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    even without mentioning love one can feel the love that spills from the heart even if it is felt from a distance and one sided. often we feel smaller than small when they don't see the beauty we illuminate from our beingbut knowing from our own wondering minds breathes true life into our being even from a distant smile in kind. thank you for entering and many blessings always xx

  • Rowan gold member
    December 26, 2007
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    I love when you speak from your heart~ damn this was good, hon. Wow...


  • IronIcecream
    December 26, 2007

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    "Has this poem mentioned love yet?"

    Has this poem mentioned it yet

    should this page mention it
    or the passion will make it spill
    onto this empty

    or find a way to avoid mentioning it
    it's much more powerful this way

    the italics do enough too...


  • B Chandler
    December 26, 2007

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    Originality

    Umm dang this was good--makes me want to remove my entry and start over again. Nevertheless, the different views recieved from this is one of 'expectance' then again of 'anticipation'. Keep penning and good luck


  • misselaineous
    December 26, 2007
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    i think this is pure calligraphy

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