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Breaking Free.

Standing on the corner,

Escape seems far away,

Inside my heart is breaking,

So I'm leaving here today,

A better life is waiting,

The screaming needs to end,

My life is full of pain and hurt,

Will you be my friend,

I need to save my soul today,

So please just pray for me,

I need to leave this city now,

I have to be set free,

Tears are commonplace here,
Dreams will always die,

Not sleeping, fear abounding,

All you do is cry,

Strangled by the emptiness,

Promises turn to dust,

Standing on the corner,

So you can eat becomes a must, 

Trust is not well known here,

You struggle on alone,

Hate filled voices envelop you,

In a rasping, greedy tone,

I'm leaving here tomorrow,

One more day cannot hurt me,

Waiting in the darkness,

For the one who'll set me free. 

 

 

 

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  • wow, i love this, its beautifully written and holds so much truth, i'm sure can relate to your words as i can, how many of us has given up hope but continued to wait for that one who will set us free. great write


  • A63-Angel
    November 11, 2008

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    this was beautiful and your page is really pretty. and, thanks for your comments on my poetry.


  • Midnite wolf gold member
    September 18, 2008

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    wow, this is amazing, the rhyming works so well and is not forced, a great write that i can relate to. x


  • BlackSwan
    May 10, 2008

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    wow the rhyming that you included into your poem is incredible! not only is it captivating but it flows perfectly. excellent write


  • LeilaJayne
    May 10, 2008

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    Congrats on making it into the finalists list, this means i read on further than the first four lines of your poem. Thanks for entering =] xx

  • Bob Fox
    May 9, 2008

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    society child

    Often left to wander in despair and loneliness. The harshness of life so well portrayed in this fine write with excellent rhyme.You painted such a vivid picture


  • calmharm
    April 25, 2008

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    thats was fabulous i really felt it and congrats on your silver i will be there some day i am new to this site i normally went to poetry.com and then heard of allpoetry.com and this site is sso much better if you would not mind reading some of mine thanks


  • teddybare gold member
    April 18, 2008

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    superb

    oh havnt we all been there once or twice? .. love it .. has great flow and : Strangled by the emptiness..
    this realy touched a nerve in me .. .. good stuff here keep it up


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    February 2, 2008

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    Wonderful write. Congratulations on your prior silver win. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.


    whisper


  • GypsyEyes
    January 26, 2008

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    loved the flow and over of all fantasic content of this poem! i wish you the best of luck in the contest!
    NineTailedFox


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    January 8, 2008

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    Wonderful poem great flow to it Great rhyming too.
    Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest I wish you the best of luck

    REDWINGSPIRIT

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