On that remote shore,
far from the security of home
and prey to the silence of dusk and the murmur of sea
we waited for the mercy of night,
the dying sun slowly painting your face with its golden foam
while growing shadows silently chased away the leftovers of light.
Night.
You chose the poem, an old tale,
your lips covered with salt
and your voice soft, loving, caring
about that buccaneer and the cracking sails and the splitting mast
and his pain when his bride was lost
to the hunger of the cold cobalt sea...
I shivered,
you embraced me
sharing with me the sweetness of kiss and the grace of nature
and the bed of sand as we fell asleep
holding hands,
face to face,
lip to lip.
Author notes
Inspired by contest picture and my imagination, and love, of course.
In a list
A contest entry
- deep water by Nicolette.
5200 points, ended January 7, 2008, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this piece could use some judicious editing, the paring away of unnecessary words here and there, but...
I LOVE THIS!
it fits that photo so well, they should be published together.
well done
thanks for entering
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This is lovely poetry... such a soft and gentle voice here. It murmurs, it laps against the soul... like water. I loved the intimacy of this poem.... two lovers reading poetry against a background of water, sands and stars. The title compliments the content of the poem so very well...indeed a beautiful story of love, intimacy and warmth. You do know how to write the stories that leave me sighing, Sonja!!
~ Nicolette
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Sweet
These are lovely images of precious moments, I enjoyed the details of sunset, sea and sand. Is this past or present, it changes. Very good to read on a cold winter day! Good luck.
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beautifuly captured moment...keep up the great work.
cheers
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Beautiful. Good luck in the contest.
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The title of this poem drew me in. It is a wonderful title and a great poem.
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circles inside circles inside circles... and finally we surface at the external circle again, looking for shadows, images of us inside tales, legends, stories, poems, and finding them. sometimes tinted with glory, sometimes with happiness, sometimes sorrow, the whole range of human emotions we are hungering for. and your poem pointed this search for me in such sharp lines and yet such soft words and background, so beautiful in its serene expression...
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This is so beautiful...and delicate. It compliments the photo perfectly and captures the gentle bliss of love
I love the flow and how the moment unfurls with such easy grace It was lovely to read. Good luck in the contest! 
Ellie
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I love love poems and this is such a beautiful poem of a love story within a love story...very creative and such beautiful imagery wrapped up in this moment..a lovely poem!
"we waited for the mercy of night,
the dying sun slowly painting your face with its golden foam
while growing shadows silently chased away the leftovers of light." what beautiful imagery..
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