Un Poema Para Usted

Escribo un poema para tu.

Eres hermoso,

y te amo...

Tu dice,

"Eres bella."

Tu dice,

"Te amo."

¿Es verdad?

Tinta para tu,

y no es verdad.

Voy de tu,

a otro hombre...

No te amo más.

~~~

I wrote a poem for you.

You're handsome,

and I love you...

You say,

"You're beautiful."

You say,

"I love you."

Is it true?

Ink for you

and it's not true.

I go from you,

to another man...

I don't love you anymore.

Author notes

Spanish poem with English translation. Okay, I know it sucks, but I tried. Please tell me if my Spanish is a bit off... I'm still only in Spanish 2 in high school!

A contest entry

Spanish Poems by warrior-eagle. 300 points, ended January 2, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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midnightblue1272
December 28, 2007

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Almost
You almost had it here. As a Spanish individual, you are supposed to use the word "ti" instead of "tu." Otherwise, very nice.
warrior-eagle
December 26, 2007

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Un NOT una.(title).
Um, it is much better to use TU instead of USTED, usted is more like in respect..as if you were speaking to your grandmother.
So use TU instead of USTED.
a otros hombre here if you meant to another MEN it is a otros HOMBRES..but if you meant to just anothe man then it is a otro hombre.

When you have corrected this with my correction I'll come back to this.

..Simply Me♥
- And Hyetal
  December 26, 2007
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  Just a question... Isn't Poema feminine, so I'd have to use "una"?
  
  Thank you for your help... Spanish is not my best subject in school.
baconlicious112
December 26, 2007
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oooh spanish!
fancy
Bryan-CarnelianHope
December 26, 2007
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Wow
Cool! I totally understoond over half of that! XD A beautiful poem, Momma Cass!
- And Hyetal
  December 26, 2007
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  Thanks, Howieness! ^^
Darkrunn
December 26, 2007
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Umm Cassie? No relflection on real life right? I hope to God so.
- And Hyetal
  December 26, 2007
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  No! Just for the Spanish contest.
Namita
December 26, 2007

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I don't know about the Spanish part, Cassie - but the English is pretty good. Good job with the translation...

~Namita