Surrounded by black cords
A single bead threaded in a net of wire
The intrusive music ignored
A blank expression
Metal eyes
The world is gone.
Author notes
I was sitting in front of the computer the other day typing on my phone. It was charging so the tangled wires were strewn across my lap. Not only that, but my Mp3 was in my ears and with more black wires around me, I felt like I was part of this circuit. And I thought about how I'd spent most of the day on my own with my electronics and that there are so many other kids out there doing the same sort of thing. It was a weird, numb sort of feeling. Strange.
A contest entry
- Hit me with your best shot by De-Throned.
450 points, ended February 20, 2008, 33 entries
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Comments
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interesting write. Good take on what your story was. my favorite part was:
A blank expression
Metal eyes
The world is gone.
Good luck in the contest
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Yeah, I like it. You have captured the idea very succinctly and well here, I think. My favorite part was:
"A single bead threaded in a net of wire" that is a really great line. -
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Thanks much <3
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short yet to the point i like it
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Thanks for the applause <3
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I agree with Silvernight, it wouldn't have worked if it were any longer. Short and to the point.
Good stuff!
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Yeah, I think I would have just been rambling and writing for the sake of it if I made it any longer. Thanks for commenting!
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Ok, I just got a flash back of the "BORG". It is amazing how we have become so entangled by technology these days. I too have felt the struggle of the black cord mess. Nice write.
Jen -
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Thanks! Though, may I ask what 'BORG' is?
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I liked it a lot. It was short yet that worked well for this. Great job.
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Thanks so much for the comment and applause! <3
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All I can say to that is: WOW.
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*purrs* thankyou so much!
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