There is nothing but raw skin,
Where you once held my hands,
And calluses rubbed large,
Into my slowly beating heart,
That you once crushed,
Between your hypothetically loving arms.
I never thought that,
I would look at you again,
With stale dry eyes.
But rather I imagined,
That the rain would be falling,
For the rest of my life.
I don’t know when the storm,
Turned into clear blue skies,
And I can’t remember,
Around what time,
The summer sun finally melted,
Your deadly winter ice.
All I know now,
Is that you were a mistake,
Beyond making.
You were a weed beyond pulling,
And you were a memory,
That is now beyond remembering.
You’re so far away,
And that’s how I plan
On keeping you from now on.
You’re so long ago,
That it seems you never happened,
And that’s exactly what I want.
A contest entry
- Such Fluttering Hope by EmotionalFire.
900 points, ended December 31, 2007, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn That Silver Into Gold! by Nicada.
300 points, ended October 8, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is beautiful and full of some amazing imagery. A poem that is very well written. Great job,and thanks so much for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty
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Fantastic, the voice was strong and the message was communicated well and creatively. You resolved this well, keep writing
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"The summer sun finally melted your deadly winter ice"
Thanks for this beautiful write. I love the imagery and the metaphor. You have alot of talent. My only suggestion for this is gramatical in the last stanza ::
And that's how I plan,
On keeping you from now on.
I don't think that there should be a comma in that. Otherwise I love it. <3 Thanks for entering! -
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Thank you for silver! Also, I fixed the error. I just have a habit of putting some form of punctuation at the end of every line.
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a stance of dis- and well to keep it afar, for some cause a pain, much like the shattered
panes eyes sometimes look through and realize love was a blind pulled down to cover the flaws...excellent write...Artis
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