Kill me if you will
They all just waited until
The words I speak
Are of truth
Don't you hear me
Daddy, I will always love you
Put the gun to my head
Your limp body
Once alive in my bed
Daddy, I'd bleed for you
But I'm already dead
Forever I'll love you
Daddy please pretend you do
Please just say
You love me too
Your angelic eyes
Filled with wonder and light
His disguise
Daddy, you never look at me
Never with love
"They just don't see it,she says
But daddy's my angel from above"
And I will always love you
Daddy please pretend you do
Please just say
You love me too
I'm so sorry
Please don't say you hate me
Daddy why do hit me?
I'm only your's Daddy
Like you always tell me
Why do you love me this way?
Think of me this way?
Don't you see what you do to me?
Why Daddy?
I only loved you
I won't ask you to say it
Not again
Because I'm not breathing
My heart is slowing
And my pulse is stopping
And... it's just... too late
Author notes
Dedicated to all the strong girls out there like my girlies who's dads didn't and will never deserve them! Breathing-Fate
A contest entry
- all the prewrites you want by serenity silvermoon.
600 points, ended March 29, 2008, 150 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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sadly i could have seen myself write this when i was the ages 8 to 12 my dad was the same way you are a great poet keep up the great work thanks for sharing and god bless you forever and always thanks for sharing god bless you forever and always love dianna lee green also knowned as serenity lynn silvermoon
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bold and fearless you write
I am so very proud of you to write with such strength
and might!
Good job dear poet, good job! You are really breaking
through to a wonderful nirvana space of strength and
bold light! You keep writing as if you are on fire!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )) get every word out!
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duuuuude. that girl needs love. :huggle: I wouldnt have repeated the one section, and I think things would feel more cohesive if it was broken into stanzas. Sometimes it's confusing who is saying "you" and who is "I" - but the relationship between the father and daughter is intense - I wonder why she doesnt tell him? She doesnt tell someone else? She hurts herself and not him? :thinks:
I feel like there is a lot to the story implied here - maybe expand on the feelings of this girl in another poem.
either way, all good.
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it was extreemly painful to see some of my friends go through these things one of my friends is sadly dead because of abuse I blame thpolice though because they didn't do any thing when we told them.
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oh my gosh! im so sorry. that's terrible. :has no words: ;_; I hope you and her/his friends have had support in the tragedy.
<3
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Great write
I felt your pain throughout this. Intense.
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This is really sad,
I look at my little princess rompin around and couldn't image letting her go through this pain.
good job writing about it.
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