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Without Remorse

Those without remorse
Who made fun of
Those without love
Will one day see


The pain they've caused

They have no feelings
For those who cut themselves
For those who are silent
For those with darkened clothes

 

Because they are different

They dare to be unique
Unlike the girls who walk
In a snake skin mini-skirt
And 6-inch high heels

 

To impress the guys who

Gel their hair for hours
Change their music style
Enter athletic teams
And even pick on

 

The weaker

If they just knew
Half the pain they caused
In the world
They would be sorry

 

But it's to late now

 

 

The pain cannot be erased
The blood stains cannot be erased
The tears that formed a sea
Cannot be erased

It cannot be undone

Author notes

CONTEST: Contest I think AP needs a Dark/Emo contest....
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Comments

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  • RosalindRawr-rific
    January 8, 2008

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    its really great i love the fact that it was well written but hate the fact that every thing is the truth


  • Lute
    December 26, 2007
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    content 6
    vocabulary 10.75
    accuracy 7
    creativity 6.3
    theme 6
    originality 6

    totals:35.05


  • okadadokie
    December 26, 2007

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    Whats sad is everything is true in this poem. The world is a painful place and the people in it only make things worse. You can open the eyes of many with this poem, and I hope you do. Mine have already been opened though, but I still understand.

    ~Oka/KC


  • EmoLink
    December 25, 2007

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    This is my favorite one that you wrote...
    Everything you wrote is very true...
    And...its strong with emotion...
    I love it....
    Great job....


  • HaileeDear
    December 25, 2007
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    i've already written a critique but i think im going to go into some more detail. There have been many people who have asked me why i do the things i do to myself (bulimia, anorexia, cutting, burning etc) and they make fun of the music i listen to ect. and all i really want to tell them is that THEY are the ones who are making me this way. THEY are the ones who cause my pain and who make us feel bad. THEY are the ones who judge us and make us think that what they say is the truth. Your write speaks nothing but the truth. wonderful..again
    xoxo pixie

  • HaileeDear
    December 25, 2007

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    This was great. I love the form you put your words in. It was like a story, or facts that were layed out. nice work.


  • Sle3p
    December 25, 2007
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    I agree totally, if they knew the pain the were causing they would shut there bloody traps. I love the picture by the way its so cool. The poem bring forth the pain that they cause to people like us. anyway nice poem i hope you do well in my contest...

    Suicide


  • adsaige
    December 24, 2007

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    I completely agree. It cannot be undone, and to answer your question, yes, I do feel the emotion. Your dedication to this subject, how strongly you hate that fact that people do this to others...bravo!

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