As I walk in the forest
I feel the presence
Of all the plants
& animals, so alive
For now...
The waterfalls
Hiding behind the trees
Hiding its breath-taking
Beauty, scared that
Humans may take it
Like how they stole
Her friends, Her surrounding
The animals,for the fur.
The trees,for the bark.
For their own profit
The killers.
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Comments
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hey this is Dani the judge....i meant to tell people that i will be a little harsh or close to mean if i don't like what i read. your border is pretty but this poem cannot be your best. i'm sorry but this poem doesn't relate to anything that i've written or will ever write. if you like to enter another one...feel free. but good luck.
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Honestly your right, its not.
But My best isnt one of those happy things.
I will re-enter.
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I would have liked this better, a bit longer, giving the amount and nature of the information you attempted to include
and, all caps and sporadic punctuation is very distracting.
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Hmm, I like this... I love nature and animals so I definatly agree that poachers are killers. Sometimes I'd love to poach them lmao j/k. I liek your use of flow and imagery. Thanks for entering my contest, best of luck!
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Thank you soo much for th3e comment on " As I walk into the forest" I really appreciate it, lately people have been saying Im not original and not good enough and your comment brought my hope abit. <3 Thank you
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Truly remarkable thoughts, showing a great concern for the nature. We destroy everything for our sake minding only our comforts, name, fame and pleasures.Well written
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This is an amazing piece.. it has to be the best I've read in a very long time! It's so beautiful, and I love the forest theme. Awesome work!
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Nice, but for the first line of the last stanza, 'Like they took stole." You should have took, or stole, not both. Keep it up!
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This is a very nice piece goodluck to you in this contest I hope you do well best wishes and much love
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this has a lot of GREAT imagery and it is a wonderful out take on the picture. I really enjoyed this! thank you for entering and Merry Christmas!
~Dommi
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