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It's Called [♥]






Love adorned our life together
Hope within those wisps of grief
Joined in terms that cant be broken
Through all storms of disbelief

Failures reeked in every corner
Brushed away when touched by you
Friendship that keeps getting stronger
Hands folded with naught to do

Silent comfort good as golden
Conversations struck by mind
Misfelt known without words spoken
Knowledge gained from time to time

Slanted rivers marked the journey
Hand in hand we're moving on
Water dripped when tears stopped flowing
Then you came, and those were gone

Nights of anguish soothed mainly
When your presence was in sight
Stronger advice held so dearly
You said things would be alright

Trusted effort freely given
Stay with me and never go
Pretence faded in your arms
Holding you since long ago

Days will pass, then months and years
Guide me through in all my strife
Never leave me on my own since
Without you, it's not called life

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

I wrote this when I was somewhat drunk.
I don't know why I wrote this. Love. Unbelievable? I know. I never write love - just dark.

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  • gypsyfan
    February 5

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    Gold

    You should have won gold, but that is just my opinion. I hate when non rhyming poems win, and short ones too. Nice write and congrats.

  • MarkReeves
    February 4
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    Excellent

    This flows so well and the words are beautiful. Enjoyed.
    Good luck in contest.


  • GypsyEyes
    November 30, 2008

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    this is just beautiful and you really took the prompt to heart. thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox


  • SincerelyMegan
    August 31, 2008

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    I find very few words to discribe this poem!
    It is nearly the definition of "Love Poem".

    Good luck!


  • trekkergirl
    August 31, 2008
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    very interesting. Good write. Good job


  • Forgot2Breathe
    July 30, 2008
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    i absolutely love this, its beautiful and you wrote it amazingly written, my favorite lines were:

    "Trusted effort freely given
    Stay with me and never go
    Pretence faded in your arms
    Holding you since long ago

    Days will pass, then months and years
    Guide me through in all my strife
    Never leave me on my own since
    Without you, it's not called life


  • L0sT-iN-ThOuGhT
    July 24, 2008

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    Um......!!!

    how could you write something as powerful as that when your "somewhat drunk"?? Totali mind-missing. LoL.I don't know if I understood as I just skimmed. It's just that the last line really got to me. Wicked work. = )


  • Shifting
    July 16, 2008
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    Wow, I like this. The rhyme and rhythm are impecable.


    Silent comfort good as golden
    Conversations struck by mind
    Misfelt known without words spoken
    Knowledge gained from time to time

    This was truly my favorite part, though I loved all of it. Thank you for entering.


  • JustFallingApart
    July 4, 2008

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    just wanted to say congradulations on winning you truely deserved it you are a very tallented poet


  • JustFallingApart
    July 3, 2008
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    that was so beautiful, and I realy like the backround, nice work and thankyou for entering


  • Mary Jane.
    June 22, 2008

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    This is beautiful. I really do like it, especially the last line. "Without you, it's not called life" I thought about my fiance when I read it, without him I couldn't live, I wouldn't want to.
    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest
    Sarah


  • Spiritual Soul
    June 11, 2008

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    wow this was amazing, and what I wanted, you did a wonderful job on this piece, and I love the background and picture, it's beautiful! Amazing job, thank you for your entry!
    Blessings,
    ~Michaela~


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    May 31, 2008

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    Very beautiful and moving work here!
    Congratulations to you on your first
    gold trophy on this. I appreciate your
    entry and wish you the best of luck with
    it in my contest!




    Jeremy0826


  • LeilaJayne
    May 8, 2008

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    I absolutely love this! Has to be the best ive read all day Thanks for entering! xx

  • DarkRomantic113
    April 17, 2008

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    I really love this poem. Whether you're drunk or thinking clearly, all these humans derive from somewhere inside you. I'm excited about this.


  • lilblueeyesmine1978
    March 2, 2008

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    Wonderful

    This is so emotional and soo true. Without love the world itself would be lost. This world and all of its inhabitants have to have love to survive. I loved the emotion in this write and I truly commend you for your talent. Keep up the good work.


  • DrkPoet silver member
    February 27, 2008

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    Beautifully penned, I must go check out some of your dark writes since you said this is not your norm and I got to say it's excellent.


  • N e a r
    February 25, 2008

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    Your background and picture are just stunning. My absolutely favorite part was "Slanted rivers marked the journey" to "Then you came, and those were gone". Like x Empathic Rose x stated, your rhyming is not forced. It has the best flow I have seen in poetry, and I am amazed by the quality. The ending just took my breath away. This has got to be my favorite love poem thus far in all my years I've been reading poetry.
    Thanks for entering your write in "Enter All Your Love Writes Here!", and good luck!
    M a r l u x i a


  • A falling star
    February 19, 2008

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    This is really pretty. You're good at drunk writing
    I especially liked the last line.
    Thanks for entering!
    -Sonya


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 14, 2008
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    Very cleverly wrote here. Love the picture and the rhyme scheme, you managed to make this sound unforced, which is hard to do sometimes with love poetry but you managed to. Oh, the backgroudns beautiful too. Very expressive words, compassionate and most importantly, true.

  • OurxBeginning
    February 11, 2008

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    This is a very sweet write. A lot of emotion and you rhyming was done very well.

    I found a few things you may want to fix.

    "Joined in terms that cant be broken"

    Cant should be can't.

    "Guide me through in all my strife"

    That doesn't make much sense to me, did you mean this instead: "Guide me through all my strife"

    I adored the ending, and it's so true when you're in love.

    Thank you for entering and good luck.


  • Endeavor gold member
    February 10, 2008

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    Excellent


    Days will pass, then months and years
    Guide me through in all my strife
    Never leave me on my own since
    Without you, it's not called life

    Inspiring words
    You should write of love more often

    Congradulations

    Rick


  • Endeavor gold member
    February 9, 2008
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    I have read your verse
    Thank you so much for submitting your words to my contest
    I will comment in detail on my final selections
    I wish you well in the contest
    Thank you

    Rick


  • BeautifulFlame
    February 4, 2008

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    Well you write great while drunk lol
    I loved this i wished i had come up with it ...maybe i need a few glasses of wine lol
    Great job
    Goodluck
    ~Lisa~


  • marciakay81
    January 28, 2008

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    this is actually really good...when i write drunk it doesn't make any sense in the morning. thanks for the entry.


  • malmadre gold member
    January 25, 2008

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    This is beautiful, even in the darkest of us there is a little part that still dreams of love. Absolutely amazing background! One of the nicest that I have seen. I tried to find a favorite verse but it all shines!


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    January 19, 2008

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    First let me say that I just love the background, and the picture is lovely. Excellent rhyming great flow.

    " Silent comfort good as golden
    Conversations struck by mind
    Misfelt known without words spoken
    Knowledge gained from time to time ".

    I really like that part,

    " Slanted rivers marked the journey
    Hand in hand we're moving on
    Water dripped when tears stopped flowing
    Then you came, and those were gone ".
    Love that part too,

    Oh who am I fooling, I really love the whole piece.

    " Without you, it's not called life ".

    Ever love haters, could use someone to love and share their life with. Love haters need love too.
    Outstanding piece of art you have penned here. I very much enjoyed reading your poem.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce

    Good Luck ~~~


  • Rose Angel gold member
    January 18, 2008

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    You drew me into this poem...as love so ardent,can fade away...the courtship, honeymoon, and after can be heaven....but like you say" Never leave me on my own, for without you it's not called life" They don't have to leave your home, but they can seem absent in your life.....Beautiful write....beginning to understand your life time pain......


  • Crazy9Piano8Freak
    January 11, 2008
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    Well sure, you very well can because - not to be mean or anything - you'd probably have a better chance of moving onto the next round ... lol
    Koko


  • Crazy9Piano8Freak
    January 11, 2008

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    well... the flow was wonderful but i'm not really a rhyming person. Thanks for the entry and good luck!
    Koko


    • Never Fall in Love
      January 11, 2008
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      Oh, shall I give you a free verse one then? Just badly need a rounds contest to keep me busy


  • acoustical
    January 10, 2008
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    BAM

    nice rhyming.


  • irishmidnight
    January 10, 2008

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    The back ground first off, Is absolutely beautiful!!! And the picture you chose...amazing!! And the writing...makes everything else on this page look bleak and nearly non existent!! Beautiful, stunning write my dear!!! Best of luck!!


  • CaliOkie silver member
    December 30, 2007

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    Moving

    I enjoyed this poem a great deal. Your imagery is great and I'm impressed with your rhythm and rhyme.

    Keep up the good work.

    CaliOkie


  • haikumonk gold member
    December 30, 2007

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    Lovely, heartfelt write. This exudes of desire and committment to the one you love. It moves rather smoothly and uses solid word choices. Good luck in the contest.


  • warrior-eagle
    December 30, 2007

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    Never leave me on my own since
    Without you, it's not called life

    THis was a great work!
    I really liked this..
    I rarely like love poems,
    but this was really good,
    great work.Piece of art.

    ..Simply Me♥


  • Ellis gold member
    December 26, 2007

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    OUTSTANDING

    Man! All I got to say is: you are good, REAL Good. The flow and rhyme are great. The message is clear. Heck, this is superior poetry.
    ------------


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    December 25, 2007
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    Sweetheart, sorry, but in reality you are LOVE ~~~

    I think I just made this my new favorite from you.
    Oh and by-the-way, if your not sure where this piece came from, look in the mirror.
    Oh and one more thing I love the background on this.
    Perfect writing, once again.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Love You,
    Granny


  • Death of the Author
    December 25, 2007

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    LOVED IT

    First off - DAMN I LOVE that background, it is AWESHUM. I don't know WHY I'm shouting RANDOM words, it's just HAPPENING like that. OK, I'll STOP.

    I really liked this, I think it is written beautifully and I don't think it's cliched at all, like you said on my piece, the idea might be cliched, but the way you have written it (beautifully, wonderfully) is everything but.

    I'll pick out some favourite parts

    wisps of grief - love that term
    terms that cant be broken - sweet ^^
    storms of disbelief - good imagery

    Hands folded with naught to do - I like that ^^

    Silent comfort good as golden - I really like that, it's so true, when you find anyone who you're comfortable with you don't have to talk incessantly, you can share a beautiful silence and it will still mean just as much.

    Slanted rivers marked the journey
    Hand in hand we're moving on - Nice imagery of the relationship being a river

    Days will pass, then months and years - sweet

    Without you, it's not called life - GREAT last line. Oh, there I AM, shouting random WORDS again.

    TAKE care x!x

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