There was a rose among the sunflowers
near the far left corner of the fence
that surrounded my backyard-
and even though the gate was locked,
it still made its way in somehow.
Three times it opened its petals,
asking for my embrace;
but I left them hanging,
because the sunflowers were looking-
and I worried if those pedals
had fallen off for eternity.
The next day it grew a thorn
that gave me doubt,
but the rose was still perfect;
and I felt that I had already
struck out,
so I starved myself of fulfilling
this hunger.
I never took a picture,
watered, picked, or tamed the rose;
for the sunflowers would have wilted
and abandoned me
had we ever fallen in love;
and three months later
you were gone.
Author notes
I posted and reposted. I originally wrote this for the contest, but the contest was closed; and then afterwards it was re-opened, so I entered it.
So those of you who are like "OMG Cheater!" shut the hell up. lol
A contest entry
- Smile? by Exodus.
525 points, ended January 18, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I don't think I like this contest anymore, you made me cry.
I'm just kidding. This is the kind of feeling I was looking for, thank you
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Oh =] I really like this poem. It gives you many different images muddled in your brain for you to think about. Pretty much saying it makes you think. Haha. Very good =] Keep writing.
SB ♥
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I like it. It's just kind of a simple idea with a bunch of sweet undercurrents. I love the image, too. I want to see this garden and just kind of chill there.
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- and I worried if those pedals
petals?
i think you could do better. overall, nice.
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lol i think this is great. very beautiful, i usually prefer rhyme myself but this works well without it.
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OMG cheater!!!!! *sounds alarm*
jk.
Lovely write. I love the metaphor. I wanna be a sunflower.
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haha
you are already a sunflower, at least one of mine at least.
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Awh, ily tyler.
*huggles*
You look like a movie star with long hair!!! -
Awh, ily tyler.
*huggles*
You look like a movie star with long hair!!!
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i think you need my hug too
beautifully done - i'm sad. [love the sunflowers]
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