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Fair Unicorn Miss

On a day the east wind blows,
The fair unicorn miss wanders through the barren coral ground,
Not as much as her mortalism shows,
And the sounds,
The Sounds,
The nothing sounds,
Play in her head.

Your not human says the grinning water snake,
And the unicorn miss swims deeper into a blackened nothing,
The coldness nearly kills her as she begins to shake,
And the sounds,
the nothing sounds,
Play in her head.

When she bore of the cold she traveled to the surface world,
Humans stared at the queer Unicorn miss as she cried in distress,
Those sounds of non-humanity haunts me,
she called drearily,
As the freak show beings tossed pollutants at her head,

And The sounds,

the nothing sounds,

Play in her head.

 

We'll watch the flames get higher she sought,

The unicorn miss who wearily lay on a stone,

Never to be mortal,

Never for the sounds to stop,

And the sounds,

The nothing sounds,

Play in her head, still.

Author notes

My really good friend from camp wrote this for me..

Her explanation of it comes right here:
Its about a mermaid unicorn thing that wishes to be human but everybody tells her no, so she gives up into cruel fate. -btw, i just made that up. its actually a happy piece of 2writting-.

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  • AlwaysbeBIG
    December 27, 2007

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    Well...

    I disagree with The Sisters Grimm. I believe the flow is supposed to be off, it's done on purpose, and it makes it even better for me

    "And the unicorn miss swims deeper into a blackened nothing,
    The coldness nearly kills her as she begins to shake,
    And the sounds,
    the nothing sounds,
    Play in her head."

    Were great lines...I loved them. Good job on the poem. Keep it up, and Happy Holidays.


  • TwiztidMaggot
    December 24, 2007

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    this is very good. I really like how it is written. Very nice work!! keep it up! My favorite stanza is the second and third ones. I love it!!!

    Crimson


  • notorious
    December 24, 2007

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    Very cool. I love unicorns, and the mystic and intrigue and cryptic quality of this poem totally work in the unicorn's favor. You should make the Your "You're" as in You are, though.


  • February Moon gold member
    December 24, 2007

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    The flow is slightly off in parts but all and all this is a nicely woven story.
    Chelsea