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rime

Your eyes
send shuddering cold

blooming through my veins.

They leave me
windswept and barren-

even their color is arctic .

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  • Phineas Red
    January 2, 2008
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    Holy shit i just felt that.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    January 1, 2008
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    i like the chill in this.

  • Sign of the Swine
    December 30, 2007

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    You conveyed a really cold mood in such a short amount of words. Wonderful talent to be able to do that. I liked this a lot, nice expression.