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Who Needs Friends?

When I was younger,
I was wild and partied hard.
And I knew plenty of people,
for there were, no holds barred.
As long as I was lonely,
in a romantic sort of way.
These people seemed content,
just to have me day by day.
Then along came my miracle,
as he swept me off, of my feet.
He was dashing and charming,
and when we danced,  you could feel the heat.
When things started clicking,
and there was more, to my life than dread.
My friends started plotting,
for they wanted, my miracle dead.
They even sunk as low,
trying to lure him, to their beds.
Lying and pretending,
setting him up, in every way.
But everytime they tried,
it was another, dragon  slayed.
Then one day, his orders came,

as they admitted,  to all  they had done.

For they were full of envy,

as  for friends,  I  left with none.

 



 

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  • raggyann
    January 1, 2008
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    this is different and sad

  • Xxkill-my-soulxX
    December 30, 2007
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    GREAT!!

    i love it, the words u said was just amazing.


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    December 27, 2007

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    Fantastic!!!

    These words really touched a nerve with me...
    People who you think are your friends, who you do nothing but give too and support, turn on you and try to pull you down with their petty jealousies when finally it is your turn to be happy or successful.
    If I were to become really bitter, my motto would probably be 'a friend in need is a... pain in the arse!!!'. Thankfully I'm not that far gone & try to embrace the friendships I do have...
    Another great write you have here...
    Well done!!!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    December 27, 2007

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    Great friends...not! Had a couple like that myself, seem only happy when things are unhappy, if you get me? a great write....good example of envy. Best of luck in the contest


  • TheClimb
    December 24, 2007
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    I've had friends like this it was awful too...I love this mama!


  • quack silver member
    December 24, 2007
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    some people suck
    *kicks them*
    your poems good i love you


  • rhondasail
    December 24, 2007

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    Hard learned lessons...(I think these were more fiends than friends)... I like the subtle rhyme and the way you used the title to introduce the text, but not restate word for word...Glad you found that miracle! Best of luck in the contest. Peace, Rhonda


  • jcat gold member
    December 24, 2007

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    Well with friends like that who needed enemies?? I had a similiar situation except that it wasn't over a guy it was over the bottle... My friends only thought I was fun and worth hanging out with if I was drunk and on drugs so they kept supplying me....They also loved the fact that I had married rich the first time around so they had direct access to the account if I was drunk and high...When I sobered up and decided enough was enough I was going to be sober and clean no one was there for me and when I divorced my first husband they all flocked to him to tell him all "my dirty little secrets".....all of which he already knew!! They are all no longer my friends!!! Happy today with a wonderful man and my children and a whole flock of friends who like me sober


  • Simply Simple
    December 24, 2007

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    Well some poeple aren't very good friends then. This was a very good poem. It flowed excellently and the rhyme wasn't forced at all. Wonderful job. ^.^ & oh yeah, remember you always have real friends on AP.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    December 24, 2007

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    You did this very well girlfriend.. Your rhyming really added to it. Good luck in the contest.
    Soulful Woman


  • Tarja
    December 24, 2007
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    This was very different. I have never heard of a situation like this one before. I liked your rhyming scheme in this, it was actually quite subtle. Thank you for entering... maybe a different... darker background would be more fit... but other than that, this was not bad.

  • Nighttime angel
    December 24, 2007

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    Wow, this is a really good poem. its amazing how some friends can do this. but then they aren't really true friends after all.
    jealousy can get very nasty. watch out for that green eyed monster.

    good luck in the contest.


    kat


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    December 24, 2007

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    Why do people do this! Chase those who do not belong to them.
    Its cruel and unfair and they are no friends are they??
    Hugs x


    • CherryOnTop
      December 24, 2007
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      You are right Julie.Theses kind of people are not friends.


  • Amythest Rose
    December 24, 2007

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    what a way to write Happy at the begin then it switches to something comletly dark and hurtful
    I have some friends like that (shes trying to screw
    the whole entire England's boyfriends)

    You can get through this is this rince charminf really loves you then both of you will prevail of them

    Good luck

    ~DeathsObsession~


  • daviscth silver member
    December 24, 2007

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    You did such an amazing job with this poem my friend. The imagery swept me off my feet. Best wishes in the contest and Merry Christmas. Love, Cathy


    • CherryOnTop
      December 24, 2007
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      Thanks Cathy for your sweet words.Merry Christmas to you as well.
      Love ya to Jan


  • SweetNessaLynn
    December 24, 2007

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    This is a great write. Envy is a ugly monster. Great job with the prompt. Love ya.


    • CherryOnTop
      December 24, 2007
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      The big old green monster There is one on every corner love ya to!!

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