inside these walls,
there's many secrets.
inside these walls,
is a world of pain.
inside these walls,
a little girl is hiding.
trying to get away,
from the guilt and shame.
Jessica is just 5 years old and her daddy beats her almost everyday
Her mother stands back in the shadows praying it will all go away
the beatings are really bad and Jessica can't fight back
it is the courage of this little girl, that her mother seems to lack
Noone knows the pain this little girl goes through each day
for it is all done inside these walls, while others go out to play
she crouches in a corner, trying to figure out what she's done wrong
singing Jesus loves me, because this is her favorite song
Why does her daddy hate her so, it must be something she's done
he beats her constantly, but never lays a hand on his son
she wonders why he calls her names and always puts her down
this tiny little girl of only 5 years old, lives right outside of town
noone ever hears her cries, inside these walls of doom
and if someone doesn't help her, she may be dead real soon
Jessica is just 5 years old and she is battered and bruised
her mother stands back and watches, afraid he'll hit her too
Author notes
I was physically and mentally abused by my daddy and that is what inspired me to write this song/poem, to make people aware of child abuse!
A contest entry
- Give ME EMOTION by Violent Glass.
700 points, ended January 29, 101 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Emotionally Destroyed by xXemo-teddybearXx.
400 points, ended April 2, 77 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Outstanding
This must be one of your best. Great writing. Invaluable lesson.
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"singing Jesus loves me, because this is her favorite song"
-i almost started to cry. this was really great. congrats on winning the contest!
[Liz<3]
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i think this is one of the best poems i've read in this contest, this is so beautiful and true
i can really relate to this because my dad abused
me as well, you captured the essence of it so well
great job
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it a good poem, but the flow isnt perfect, maybe you could take out a few lines or improve on word choice, still i think this one deserves a second look
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very moving, im sat in tears reading this, it brings back so many memories to myself, i dont think anybody could have wrote it better, well done you
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Painfully touching
This poem touches me deeply and I can relate all too well to this. I am sorry that you were not loved and valued as the special little girl you were. We all deserve that and too many children live with abuse every single day. Nice job expressing your pain. Writing can be so healing. Blessings, Patty
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This was so very sad...It's impossible to understand how a parent caould choose to allow this...Thanks for entering.
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Oh wow this is really emotional and more should be done to stop child abuse,I speak to kids who have been abused and they are so brave,forget about Hollywood stars these kids are the real stars
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Thank you for your very touching poem in our contest. You have covered the subject of child abuse beautifully, I'm sorry you had to experience it first hand.
Please join us in our future contests, we look forward to reading your entries...
Sue and Jeff
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i was abused to great write
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Excellent Writing
This poem touched my heart. It would seem to me that it MUST have won some awards, but I don't see them. A great mystery??
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Such honor and justice you wrote
for her. Tender and revealing teaching us all to keep
our eyes and ear open so no little girl has to live
and cry all these tears. I'm so proud to be a part of
this group, can you image with the world we be like if
no one shared their powerful voice?
Thankyou for such a wonderfully written poem!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen/Seattle good good job!
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wow!!!!!!!!!!
you know this poem was a very hard one to read...
i got goose bumps just reading it...
you are a very talented writer and i just wanted to
say that you are beautiful and everything that happened to your was horible and wrong...
i don't know how you feel but i can support you...
if you ever want to talk i am here for you..
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this is sad im sorry it happened to you
love rhianna
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It is hard to forgive a mother who just sits and watches for she is afraid too. This makes it hard to trust anyone, for if the ones who love you treat you like this, then how can you trust ones who do not love you? Such a sad sad piece of your life penned. You have written it with emotion and finese...well done. I understand this pain, the fear of a parent...not easily forgotten. May you be blessed forever.
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"Inside These Walls"
inside these walls,
there's many secrets.
inside these walls,
is a world of pain.
inside these walls,
a little girl is hiding.
trying to get away,
from the guilt and shame.
This is my favorite part of this poem. I am sorry that you have such a personally sad story to tell and I hope that writing will help heal you. Thank you so much for entering my contest. -
few things yah need tah fix
ok, so usually things like this just annoy me.(don't ask lol) but it's good. I have respect for your life and your life story, but even when a poem is about your life, it still has to earn my respect.
"the beatings are really bad" come on. "really bad" doesn't give it justice.
"she may be dead real soon" isn't offensive like "really bad" but still isn't good writing.
Also, that final line of the poem: it may be true, but you don't elaborate on the mother at all. you should leave the mother out, and focus on poor little Jessica. It really detracts from the poem.
im happy that this poem is not at all like those despicable chain letters from people who've never been there and don't know what it's like and just go "oh poor jessica" without understanding at all. like i think in the comments earlier someone called what your father did "inconsiderate"
This is a good poem. thanks for entering. lemme know if/when you decide to fix it up. -
Oh I am so sorry to here that... it's good that you have found ways to cope though and that you are making it known to other people. Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Sorry you had to go through what you did, nobody's father should ever be so inconsiderate of their childs feelings and beat them, it's just terrible. I don't understand why he hurt you and not others in the family, that must've made you feel even more blame.
If you ever want to talk about things you can message me. I know how horrible it can be to feel mentally abused as I've had that before and grew up with a violent sister who had schizophrenia. -
oh wow, that is so moving, it almost made me cry. I dont have a great dad myself, i penned a poem about him on my page.,well.. its a sensitive subject for me.. and wow.. i actually got a ...clot in my throat. this is really amazing, so wow. no words really.i am still young, no kids my self yet but.. i got a person i love, and..he's got a "dad" too.. and we both got a thing for that.I decided long ago that my kids will grow up differently. thank you so much, its really touching.Its a great poem. thank you so much again.And great rhyme btw.-elena
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Thanks for entering.
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HOLY SHIT!
this is one fucked poem it was pretty good. keep up the good work and thanks for entering my contest. -
sweetheart another chapter to your life... im so sorry. a beautiful piece although sorrowful to say the least, when daddy is the cruelful beast. the one that hides beneath your bed, while you scream in your dreams. truely wonderfully written,
huge hugs n lotsa love,
georgie,
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I know it is not a poetic thought, but perhaps your mom should have bought a Glock and put some slugs into the animal. Hollow points preferably. I just cannot stand animals like that. They don't deserve to live. I hope and pray you will be okay and able to lead a good life. Sorry for being so frank, but these things just make me rage. Take care and good luck in the contest.
AD
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This is by far the best I have seen in poetry today. Your anger, frustration and emotions are well covered. My heart goes out to you. God Bless You for sharing.
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tears fall within the silence where pain shatters a heart
within a dream at time!
Keep penning on on stroke at a time!
Bill
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So Sad
You wrote this very well and all this is so true and I'm so sorry this happened to you. I've been abused as well. We've been dealt some very difficult trials. Oh how I could relate to this poem so much it's unbelievable. This is a great poem for physicall and mentall abuse awareness. You are and excellent poet and you penned this very well. Must have been painful to write. Hope it helps many and I'm sure it will. Thank you for sharing with me. I wish you the best Christmas you can have. Love ya,
Kelle Marie
stavykm
My prayers are with you and myself because of our losses.
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this is so real ...sorry for your horrible experience ...I was mentally abuse and emotionally tormented ...I can feel your pain ...thanks for entering my contest and for sharing your story! it helps a little part of you to speak about it while it aids a little part of someone else that knows what you mean...
Love, Raneika
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Oh. This is a very sad poem that you have penned here. It is very hard for me to try to know what it would be like for children going through this. It must be a terrible thing to have in your past. I think that it is brave of you to speak out and help make others aware.
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Written as only a survivor can. Thi sbrought me to tears.
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