look me in the eyes
just one last time
if you do you will never turn away
my tears I now drowned in
longing to feel your mesmerizing touch
the one that calms my tears
the blood slowly draining
wishing for him
to look in my heart one last time
if he did he would scream
feel my pain
crash around him
beautiful i never was
and now i can never be
with the blood draining
A contest entry
- The Form of Love by Perfectly Imperfect.
450 points, ended January 4, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Blood Stained Teardrops by Blooming Poet.
450 points, ended January 3, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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So emotional. You can feel the pain of this write. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
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im glad you like it i was woried that nobody would like it but im glad that my emotions came threw im glad you could see it.
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I like this, the emotion is evident. I like the last stanza the best Well done and thank you for entering x
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i liked it, but im not a huge fan of poetry that doesnt rhyme... it was good though!
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thank you alot i'm glad that you liked it.... even though it doesnt rhyme
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the ending really makes this. ties it nicely together. strong write,
Creatress
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thank you
im glad you liked it
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