I would curse the walls around me
If i could only see
A new beginning a new life
The fire within me is dying
A silent flame undone
The coal is becoming cold
Let the coldness surround me
and let me drift alone
The sword is being sheathed
The blood is fallen neath
The Black Lord is coming
The Night is drawing near
They will sweep me in up in
their gentle wings
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good job. i was trying to picture it in my head, it turned out pretty cool. great write and thanks for entering. good luck.
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I agree with June-Bug09, I love the imagery.
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I love to imagery, it's a wonderfully written poem
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It's sad. Sad, but well delivered with good imagery. I don't know if you want constructive criticism or not... if so, there wasn't any punctuation, if not, I didn't say anything
Honestly, it was very good.
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Love it
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WOW excellent use of imagery
I can see your pain and misery as if it were my own
keep it Real
Amon-Ra
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This one really gets me everytime I read it. I've been here many times, and I know how it feels to want to just give up. There's so much frustration in this poem. It's great how you manage to get things out so perfectly. You should never give up on what you believe in. Life is meant to be a challenge. It's what keeps up occupied.
. Keep up the great work. Talk to you soon. oh, and merry christmas -Me
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