a hug turns into a kiss,
[i think of how much i love you]
a kiss turns into a french,
[i think that you only like me]
a french turns into a feel,
[i tell you i dont want to]
a feel turns into a fuck,
[yet you do it anyways]
No.
[i start to get depressed]
not a fuck, but making love.
[i start to die inside]
passionate love.
[i cry, without tears]
he moves inside me.
[i think how much hes hurting me]
and then
passionate love
turns into a feel
a feel turns into a french
a french turns into a kiss
and a kiss turns into a hug.
he put his clothes on
[and walked away]
as i remained there
[crying and dead inside]
What did you think
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this was interesting, it seems as if it's two poems morphed into one. i like it, thanks for entering!
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very emotional and powerful piece of writing...it structred good also...
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oh how depressing it makes me want to cry
i never thought something like that could happen. other then in the movies and books and stuff like that but this brings it in to perspective for me. i can see now that that could happen to... anyone if they make the mistake of falling "in love" with someone like that.
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This has hit hard, hurting more than you realize. As a father that emphasized to his sons how to behave on a date, please know not all guys behave this way.
Hold your head up and know the shameful one
"put his clothes on
[and walked away]"
Jim
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sorrowful.so sad how those we care about can do the most horrible things to us.neh?
i would never do this to my girl(or any)...i disagree with what "just falling" said about emotions being almost impossiable to imagine....i have four friends
(2 tried to commit suicide) that are very dear to me who have all been raped by those they cared about and one multiple times...and i have come to be a shoulder to cry on for one of them twice after it happened.thank you for shareing you story and i am sorry(as a man) that this was done to you.
kudos,
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This is a fantastic poem, I am so sorry you had to endure this. The act of lovemaking should be sacred and enjoyed by both people. -
this says so much more than what it reads. i hope it really didnt happen to you or anyone you know, if so i terribly sorry.
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thanks
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Man this poem is so powerful.It is true though i have felt the same way and it is an awful feeling.
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EMOTIONS ARE ALMOST IMPOSIBLE TO IMAGINE IF WE OURSELVES HAVE NEVER SUFFERED, BUT WHEN WORDS ARE PLACED SO PERFECTLY, DESCRIBING THE SCENERY, THE MOMENT COLLAPSED WITH DEEP EMOTION, WE ARE ABLE TO PLACE OURSELVES IN THOSE SHOES TO WALK THAT ROAD OF PAIN AND WHEN WE DO THAT FOR OTHERS, WE THEN REALIZE DAMN IT HURTS AND WE OURSELVES SEEK POSSIBILITIES OF OVERCOMING THE PAIN OF LIFE WHEN IT IS PERMANENTLY BURNT INTO OUR MINDS, THAT WE AWAKE WITH, WE LIVE WITH, WE SLEEP WITH. AND THEN I REALIZE SLEEP CARRIES NO PAIN.
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thanks for reading and commenting, and applauding. mm its very sad that im only 16 and ive experienced more than some people have experienced in an entire lifetime. ive been raped multiple times been involved with drugs have tried to commit suicide had abusive step parents and thats only the start of it. well i think im gunna write a poem for a contest in a minute ill let you know when its up
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