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Pyramid

Kings

Pharoahs

of Egypt

Desert kingdoms

blowing time away

with ev'ry single breath

Lost inside the sandy storms

looking for treasures forgotten

by all except for those inside of

monstrous pyramids, temples of the dead

 

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  • Namita silver member
    December 23, 2007

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    Great job on the etheree! You're really good at forms. But I do believe its "monstrous" in the last line and it consists of 2 syllables and not 3, making it a total of only 9 syllables in the last line... you can do something about it. Great job, otherwise!!


  • Darkrunn
    December 23, 2007

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    Not to mention your oogling over the Mummy ride at Universal, huh? Great form cass.