The moment I lost my heart,
I saw that it fell right into your hands.
My hands are still empty.
A contest entry
- Prompt 25 words or less/10 entries by mysticstorm.
600 points, ended December 23, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Simply Beautiful!
That is so beautiful!! There is nothing more wonderful than knowing no matter where you go ... there is someone waiting to catch your fall!!
Well done on the gold!!
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this was good till the ending it made no sence when you say your hands are still empty
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This sounds quite similar to what I was saying to my friend Jordan yesterday about giving my heart to Karl. He said, 'you still love him' I said 'I don't want to' and he said, 'but you gave it him and it's still in your hand... that is, after he's dropped and picked it up a thousand times'. Great expressivenes.
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Great piece...simplicity is awesome and very thought provoking...
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wow
so short, but it just goes right through me and send chills right down my spine. the emotions are so great for such a short poem. sometimes less is more, and i think you just proved that point in this very amazing poem.
great write.
blessed be
<3
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Wonderful take on the prompt. Very well done in so few words, saying so much. A lovely write full of emtions.
Well done.
Thank you for entering!
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