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Scents of You

we sang

silent night in drunken lyrics

between dreams and slow dances

with poetry

 in our secret hiding place called life

 

wrapping tinsel

around our necks like clowns

laughing underneath moonlight bubbles

making memories for 2007

 

defining moments in passing time

in the midst of homemade love

chills seeping into our spine as we kissed

‘neath mistletoe at midnight hour

 

with body and soul

you speak to me in scents of flowers

sweet tulips, daffodils and fragrant roses

synchronizing moves as tranquility floats

inside a fine line of calm

            with shades of silver, blue and gold

stripped down to bare words

curled into scents of You

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt: you left this feeling here inside me

I hope I'm not going to AP hell

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  • CarCrashHumor
    February 18, 2008

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    you're certainly not in ap hell haha

    this was a great piece, your own style was very prominent in it too.

    "wrapping tinsel

    around our necks like clowns

    laughing underneath moonlight bubbles

    making memories for 2007"
    loved that stanza

    thanks for entering!


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    December 28, 2007

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    Oh this is just wonderful! Nothing, nothing in this is in any way cliche! It's stunning and so full of the wonder of love
    All the best with this

  • PureCountry
    December 23, 2007

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    WOW

    with body and soul

    you speak to me in scents of flowers

    sweet tulips, daffodils and fragrant roses

    synchronizing moves as tranquility floats

    inside a fine line of calm

    with shades of silver, blue and gold

    stripped down to bare words

    curled into scents of You

    What wonderful words you have poured out here. The feelings someone can leave inside of us, is as vast an array that each individual can comprehend.

    Your words sing of a song that is joyous, meant to be shared. Wonderfuly done, my friend.