He had a monster, you know.
I could see it, really I could!
It's hiding just behind the eye
Buried deep in the retina.
It made him sick, it hurt him,
And it got deep into his brain!
It makes him act and say awful things.
I had to get it out!
So I confronted 'it' and Jack,
And they didn't quite know what I meant
But I guess the monster had Jack now
And was trying to make me stop!
I had to silence it, I knew,
By grabbing Jack's throat and squeezing
"I've got you now, you monster!"
And then Jack and 'it' went limp.
I put him down and took my sword
(Well, not a sword, a knife)
And then I stabbed the evil beast!
I think I might've hurt Jack.
Now, the monster has gone away
And Jack's in a better place, they say.
Now, do you have any more questions for...
Wait, what's that in your eye?
Author notes
I chose option 2.
In a list
A contest entry
- A Dark/Emotional Contest by Simply Lost.
450 points, ended January 2, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A great ending to a fab write, well penned. Best of luck in the contest and Merry Christmas!
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This is a very good take on the option! I like the rhyme, and the structure is very good!
The imagery is quite creepy, and I like the way you involve the reader at the end.
Good luck!
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ha ha
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