dark enough your emeralds glow
to death do we part, ended that fuckin show
you gave me no reason now i give you this ryhme
i hope your fuckin happy
livin this life of crime
this heartfelt beat
on the edge of your seat
drivin your getaway van
you stole his heart and left him dead
but made him a better man
hope your happy with your ill-gotten gains
cause hells never been wetter with sin
cause stark enough you told him to die
but all alone he'll never cry
he knows the secret to lifes empty names
they call love
ice
and long dead remains
you arent the first and death aint the last
all of the heartbreak remains
this heartfelt beat
on the edge of your seat
drivin your getaway van
you stole his heart and left him dead
but made him a better man
hope your happy with your ill-gotten gains
cause hells never been wetter with sin
this heartfelt beat
on the edge of your seat
drivin your getaway van
you stole his heart and left him dead
but made him a better man
hope your happy with your ill-gotten gains
cause hells never been wetter with sin
In a list
A contest entry
- Love me or burn me by Shadowfang.
300 points, ended March 20, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow, i love this. love it love it love it. fix a few grammatical errors and it will be perfect.
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Deeply emotional..
I do haveto agree with Warrior-Eagle and Lowecase Prelude... Very harsh, painful and angry...
But great. I love the power your emotions give to these words -
such emotion. i think i'm going to have to second Warrior-Eagle on this one.
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this is really harsh,
really angry,
really painful
and that's the reason why I love it.
very good.
...Simply Me♥ -
this is really rough and harsh but it seems to get your feelings across quite well anyhow. Great work on this poem
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OOH NICE!!!
I really liked the repitition. Great poem!
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wow... yea your a much better writer than me it's not fair. god this is an amazing poem/song/write/... yea it's beautiful okay lol love it =] ♥
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I find I did in fact particularly like this piece, and things about you to your AP page, then I could get to know you and you're writings, much better! Welcome to AP, I'm sure you'll love it.
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This is very good. Welcome to AP. I hope you enjoy it.
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